drops of connection

drops of connection

 

 

dysfunctional delirium

a family farce

grey skies bloom deceit

blood falls like lost rain

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/22/24

Reviews

[Soren]

Jacob this poem is masterful in structure and emotional affect. The alliteration of the first two lines hooks and reels in the reader then hit with the poetic greatness of the next two lines. The vagueness of meaning in contrast to the sharp imagery causes the mind to stop full course and return again and again in search of meaning to such colorful images. Psychologically loaded with meaning and metaphor a true masterpiece my friend.

[iTryToWriteAllTheTime]

This gave me shivers. I love the clear feeling this evoked in me. Lost rain, bloom deceit. Powerful stuff, the diction tickles my brain and is inspiring to hear.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review,
j.

[AYVID N]

This poem has such strong imagery. It gives me a feeling of deception in the family. The betrayal of bonds of blood. The loss of something precious and the eventual fallout, a desolation in the face of dysfunctional relationships. Dear Jacob, your poetry is breathtaking always!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

You are kind...thank you, Divya,
j.

[willweb]

Families are like that at times but without them, there would (probably) be no us. Absorb, reflect, move on.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is so true, will.
thank you,
j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, will.
thanks,
j.

[mabel mae]

great title. really connects to your poem. this really resonates with me. it reminds me of when i was a young girl, figuring out living with the overwhelming cover of my parents gone. thank you j. -mabel

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am glad you could find a way to relate to this,
thank you, mabel mae,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Connection...communication....without it, there can be no familial harmony. Very sad emotions in this one, Jacob. The alliteration adds to the power of the poem. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your understanding, Lydi,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Drops of connection is a great title. Communication is key for maintaining happy family relationships. Blood ties don’t necessarily mean harmony. Blood ties can and do cause much rainfall and storms too. There needs to be a strong flow of connectivity. Droplets are meager.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your perceptive review, Chris,
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

This sounds like a whole lot of dysfunction within a family to me

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, P.B.
some families just have so much.
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

That they do my friend