slain

slain

 

 

 

 

it was a high coo

in the morning sunrise

until the dove bit the dust

 

and another nation fell

and demise crept closer

as talons limped

 

a symbol learning how to walk

because it can no longer fly

countries look on

 

the aviary is cluttered with molted feathers

Peace between the wings

is a fiasco

 

the birds are spinning in grief

humans suffer oblivion

as the Eagle crashes into

 

earth it has shaped for itself

the landing gear

dissuaded by selfish chaos

 

democracy is the prey

and it got away.

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/27/24

Reviews

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Jacob,

Me thinks you be talkin' the evil truth about a nation that I love ... Good for you ... Keep tellin' it just the way it is ...

Marve

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, very sad...thank you, Marve,
j.

[Stella Armour]

The dove is key to this , symbolic of peace and yet we keep clipping its wings .... how cruel and downright evil we humans can be at times :(

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and getting more evil every moment.
thank you, Stella,
j.

[Desert Knave]

Yeah, the eagle has not landed. Seems like things are going to get worse either way. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Jim,
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a write that no matter where you stand politically can be felt. The dove shot is a loud statement of peace being lost. Parties fighting, people hating for differences in political options. Politician corrupt as usually fight amongst each other not accomplish anything for they only care about their own pockets. The Eagle wounded and limping crashing to earth with all the disarray and chaos surrounding the great nation.

The images are spot on and reveal what a tragedy it truly is and how sad the state this great nation is in

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, P.B.
it is all too sad and disheartening.
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

That is certainly true

[Anita Frader]

Your use of the dove in this piece is brilliant and the eagle unfortunately has landed on the wrong side of peace.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Anita,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

we cant' even save ourselves. let alone other countries who need us; we are crippled like the hawk....and our country is heading towards chaotic fascism ....we must repair our broken society back to democracy....
and let the hawk fly...freedom....wonderful metaphors as always
Warmly, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

And we just experienced what was supposed to be Super Tuesday...and it is more like Bleak Tuesday.read moreAnd we just experienced what was supposed to be Super Tuesday...and it is more like Bleak Tuesday.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Indeed, very disturbing… difficult to watch…
Warmly, B

[Ted Kniffen]

And we know well
the road to Hell
has been paved and converted
and utterly perverted
by do-gooders.

So far from the Summer of Love
not far enough away from' 62.

You speak a sad truth my friend.

I believe we have lost our way.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am afraid we have Ted...'62 was a good year...and then things started to fall apart....
Thank you, Ted.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

No truer words has been spoken sir Jacob; we are trying to save democracy but I see a nuclear war on the horizon that will destroy humanity and democracy.
They went about handling Russia, Ukraine and Israel, Palestine in the most wicked and short-sighted ways; oh, well!
There are better ways to solve things, bring just and fair peace along with justice, but the powers that be don't like those ways; many industries rely on wars and their huge profits.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that nuclear war does seem almost as close as it was in 1962...I remember walking several blocks to school that October wonder whether I would make it there or not.
thanks, Sami.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! A good idea for a poem perhaps. You are welcome sir Jacob.
Already threats has been made; push him in a corner and he will use them

[Neville]

tis good to see you are still beating your drum jacob .. I do believe it is so necessary these days and this has got more symbolism than ginger baker, john bonham, nick mason, cozy powell, charlie watts, keith moon & ringo starr put together .. I sincerely hope your message is heard and heeded. oh' and the capitol P and the E are the icing on the cake .. write on sir, I fear dark times are ahead.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

One of my friends is Georgie Waller....a wonderful lady who used to be married to Gordon of the duo Peter and Gordon. You reminded me of her with this response...she dated Keith Moon for two years and said it just got too crazy...I wanted to be drummer from the time I was five....maybe it is a good thing that did not happen.
thank you, Neville...

appreciate your comments.
j.

[Neville]

My pleasure.
N.

[Chris Shaw]

Freedom is under threat as never before. Democracy must prevail. We are living in dark times. We all want that dove of peace.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I think I saw that Dove this morning, Chris...flying way off in the distance.
j.