Vision's Verily Vicious Circumference

Vision's Verily Vicious Circumference

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

Vision's Verily Vicious Circumference

it's a pitch blue sky
black to my eye
too dark for the clouds to appear
in fascist gray

the day
awaits closure
thieves steel the azure
the world in fissure

separates in tone
hurt and anger toss the stone
a grave opens
but no one emerges

even he resists the temptation to rise
when again is in such chaos
prayer becomes a hard rain
Dylan is searching another color

while the world is tangled up 
in its own greedy hate
conflict creating
a more complicated "Twist of Fate"

suffering, destruction, the bombs
all done with such aplomb
it's shown every night on the news
and now we all got the blues

but only a shattered canopy
a spoiled canvas
an artist's nightmare
a deluge of suffering

a cumulative cumulus
an aborted resurrection
an ironic ascension
into this manmade hell.


erin-cilberto
2/5/24

© 2024 jacob erin-cilberto


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Remarkable writing skills with unique selection of words to describe the content. I really enjoyed reading it.

Posted 9 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

Thank you, Maximus,
j.
Visual under-stated understanding at first, gradually stanza by stanza reaping raw truths that finish with both silent scream and ironic pessimism.

Truth is Man lives in a world he created: generation by generation making messes that - like forms of -acid, have gradually poisoned our planet and continue to do so.

Tragically true and becoming worse:

'a cumulative cumulus
an aborted resurrection
an ironic ascension
into this manmade hell.'

Your poems - whatever you post, can strike fear or sweet gentility in turn, sir.

Posted 9 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

Thank you, em,
j.
I never imagined I'd live in a world that set us back the way a certain former U.S. president did. Or the Russia/Ukraine situation. Peace comes round in cycles. It doesn't last. Truly a man made hell, yet those responsible are blind to reason.

Posted 9 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

Yes, Anita, most definitely set back.
thank you,
j.
Ah, such alliteration and assonance - and so much Jacob. This is a great read.

Posted 9 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

Thank you, Andrew,
j.
A comment, I think, on the current state of world affairs. The first verses feature images of separation, such as "the world in fissure." Later verses mention the conflicts as reported on the news, which offers no relief to our stressed out minds. The speaker finds little to comfort us in this "manmade hell." I wish I could offer a counter argument. Maybe the results on election day will cheer us up.

Posted 9 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

Thank you for your words, John,
j.
Yes if you were an alien you wouldn't want to holiday here. It's strange how we quarrel and fight amongst ourselves( human species) and expect aliens to be friendly. Yes the way things are going the circumference may drop a belt size or two.

Posted 9 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

many belt sizes,
thank you, andrew.
j.
Yes the vision is viscious.

Such a dark write j.

thieves steel the azure - yes sliced the colour out of the sky with their blades

the news is certainly full of the blues. Hard to stomach, can only watch in small doses, yet still fully aware it is going on.

What a planet we live on.

even he resists the temptation to rise,
yes it’s a man made hell and I don’t see anything changing soon. More of it.

Dylan is searching for another colour.

You paint it black j. jet black.

Chris


Posted 9 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

Jet black....thank you, Chris,
j.
The reference to Dylan just sent me into a snicker ... yeah, the world seems to be tangled up in a particular shade of brown right now. I really do not see that changing for a long while ... we haven't bottomed out yet. Anyhow, great venting here. ~Jim

Posted 9 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

Thank you, Jim,
j.
Jacob,
In the first few stanzas, i was reminded of the sky here over the Great Plains. There are many days when there is nothing but a giant bubble of blue so deep, you can see the black on the other side. Then come th chemtrails firs one blemish, then crossed by another and another all morning, so by the afternoon the entire sky is white with whatever they've done.
My second thought was about the Modernists in their desperate attempt to pull the fragments together and make some kind of new sense of the Western world. Didn't work. We're still lost as a people, now faced once again with the possibility of "Mutually assured destruction." WE barely survived the last go-round when world leaders were strong and easily defined. The nice part about being a nihilist, is if there is no hope, why worry? Eat the good food, drink the wine, dance the night away, and laugh pout loud at every opportunity.
(I do not watch the news, only check the headlines to see if we need to take some food and water and go underground.... so far, so good)

Posted 9 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

So many have given up on watching the news...never anything good.
j.
I wish there was a vaccine we could give the whole world. It would be anti=hate. Yes, the nightly news is quite depressing lately. It is absolutely a "manmade hell" out there. "Pitch blue sky" is such a great phrase. Jacob, your poetry is always excellent. Even the alliteration of your title is super. Lydi**

Posted 9 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

that vaccine is a great idea, Lydi.
j.

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Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..

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