Thieves in Nightfall

Thieves in Nightfall


first kiss
annulled the amusement
lips lied
attraction fled


erin-cilberto
1/10/24

Reviews

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Holy crap, what a return to yesteryear this piece inspired in me ... As a teen, I had a crush on this neighbor girl and wanted to date her ... She seemed to be the prettiest thing ... Finally, I got my wish ... Took her to the drive inn movie ... had a decent time ... took her home, as she lived right across the street, and kissed her good night ... You know she is never meant for you, when your mind tells you that she kissed you like a dead fish ... LOL! ... And that, was the end of that ...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Dead fish don't jump out of the car on dates either, they just flop onto the pavement.
thank you, Marve,
j.

[Shweta]

In a flash it was all over!

This can be a good read in Senryu too? I have been thinking way too much on those lines recently.. lol.

Happy weekend!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Shwetz...same to you.

[Thomas W Case]

Fantastic in its brevity. Good work.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Thomas...welcome to WC...
j.

[John the Baptist]

Well, some of them go south quicker than others. Not sure what it was about that first kiss, but lying lips are grounds for rejection.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, grounds....and not the coffee kind.
thank you, John,
j.

[Arundass TP]

I love those lines. Meaningful and thought provoking. Brilliantly written poem

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Arundass,
j.

[keith]

what happened to 'love the one you're with' ?
less is more!
few words much meaning

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, keith.
j.

[Andrew John]

Long time since I kissed (except someone's pet cat - or was it a dog?), but, hey! Seeing the amusement annulled can be, er, amusing. Nice thoughts here, J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Andrew...
j.

[willweb]

Don't you just hate when the carnival pulls up stakes before you can enjoy the full impact of what it offers, or perhaps, what it advertises? Nice one Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you...and yes...
j.

[Desert Knave]

This one hits a little close to home ... eyes lie and lips lie, but kisses seldom do. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I feel the chill...thanks for your words, Jim,
j.

[Bare Trees]

There's nothing worse than a limp kiss with no conviction. Especially if it's the first.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

That is true Relic..that is true.
j.