a school of angry whales
A Poem by
jacob erin-cilberto
a school of angry whales
gutted emotions
mutiny of feelings
the captain's calm
is truant
the heart is capsizing
while downsizing
one of the lifeboats
is missing.
erin-cilberto
12/27/23
© 2023 jacob erin-cilberto
Reviews
brutal helplessness .. devastates life .. brilliant shot shot to the soul, this one, Jacob .. it impacts me .. a pressure like a heart attack.
E.
Posted 10 Months Ago
10 Months Ago
Thanks so much for your kind words, E.
j.
"the heart is capsizing
while downsizing "
Interesting words .This poem must have more than one interpretation which often the case with one from heart .
Posted 10 Months Ago
"the heart is capsizing
while downsizing "
Interesting words .This poem must have more than one interpretation which often the case with one from heart .
10 Months Ago
Pick the one that works for you, ghost.
I think most poems have multiple meanings if both aut.. read more Pick the one that works for you, ghost.
I think most poems have multiple meanings if both author and reader let them.
thank you,
j.
Interestingwhile all the words mention the nautical this has nothing to do with the sea, or whales. It is nontheless extremly profound in its manners.
Posted 10 Months Ago
Interestingwhile all the words mention the nautical this has nothing to do with the sea, or whales. It is nontheless extremly profound in its manners.
10 Months Ago
such insight, Ken...well, you know my metaphorical mind probably better than I do.
thank you,.. read more such insight, Ken...well, you know my metaphorical mind probably better than I do.
thank you,
j.
Now this is a write, the heart is capsizing" I can see this as emotional.
I really enjoyed this write. Nicely written.
Posted 10 Months Ago
Now this is a write, the heart is capsizing" I can see this as emotional.
I really enjoyed this write. Nicely written.
10 Months Ago
Thank you, Meg,
j.
I can feel the emotions in your poem, the gutted emotions and mutiny of feelings. Very nice, I really liked the angry whales too, such great imagery.
Posted 10 Months Ago
I can feel the emotions in your poem, the gutted emotions and mutiny of feelings. Very nice, I really liked the angry whales too, such great imagery.
10 Months Ago
thank you for the kind review, Norma,
j.
I relate this to politics where the public are getting fed up with broken promises while the leader is oblivious to it all.
Posted 10 Months Ago
I relate this to politics where the public are getting fed up with broken promises while the leader is oblivious to it all.
10 Months Ago
ah yes, thank you, andrew...
j.
Someone has jumped ship and got away in a life boat. There is now no mutiny on board.
I read whales as wails .
Very much open to interpretation. That’s what I saw dear j.
Chris
Posted 10 Months Ago
Someone has jumped ship and got away in a life boat. There is now no mutiny on board.
I read whales as wails .
Very much open to interpretation. That’s what I saw dear j.
Chris
10 Months Ago
and they are certainly wailing at this point.
thank you, Chris,
j.
Jacob another jewel. Here the use of metaphor works so well.
Posted 10 Months Ago
Jacob another jewel. Here the use of metaphor works so well.
10 Months Ago
Thank you, Soren,
j.
This is open to interpretation I guess but we feel loss and the raked raw emotion of it. Your pen remains a rapier at the heartstrings. I enjoyed.
Posted 10 Months Ago
This is open to interpretation I guess but we feel loss and the raked raw emotion of it. Your pen remains a rapier at the heartstrings. I enjoyed.
10 Months Ago
Thank you, Fabian.
j.
I love the spacing and formatting of this, the way spaces can change the story is always so interesting to me, wonderful piece :)
Posted 10 Months Ago
I love the spacing and formatting of this, the way spaces can change the story is always so interesting to me, wonderful piece :)
10 Months Ago
Thank you for your words, nadia,
j.
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jacob erin-cilberto Carbondale, IL
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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po..
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