a school of angry whales

a school of angry whales

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto

a school of angry whales


gutted emotions
mutiny of feelings
the captain's calm
is truant

the heart is capsizing
while downsizing
one of the lifeboats

is missing.



erin-cilberto
12/27/23

© 2023 jacob erin-cilberto


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brutal helplessness .. devastates life .. brilliant shot shot to the soul, this one, Jacob .. it impacts me .. a pressure like a heart attack.
E.

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

Thanks so much for your kind words, E.
j.
"the heart is capsizing
while downsizing "
Interesting words .This poem must have more than one interpretation which often the case with one from heart .

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

Pick the one that works for you, ghost.
I think most poems have multiple meanings if both aut.. read more
Interestingwhile all the words mention the nautical this has nothing to do with the sea, or whales. It is nontheless extremly profound in its manners.

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

such insight, Ken...well, you know my metaphorical mind probably better than I do.
thank you,.. read more
Now this is a write, the heart is capsizing" I can see this as emotional.
I really enjoyed this write. Nicely written.

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

Thank you, Meg,
j.
I can feel the emotions in your poem, the gutted emotions and mutiny of feelings. Very nice, I really liked the angry whales too, such great imagery.

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

thank you for the kind review, Norma,
j.
I relate this to politics where the public are getting fed up with broken promises while the leader is oblivious to it all.

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

ah yes, thank you, andrew...
j.
Someone has jumped ship and got away in a life boat. There is now no mutiny on board.

I read whales as wails .

Very much open to interpretation. That’s what I saw dear j.

Chris



Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

and they are certainly wailing at this point.

thank you, Chris,
j.
Jacob another jewel. Here the use of metaphor works so well.

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

Thank you, Soren,
j.
This is open to interpretation I guess but we feel loss and the raked raw emotion of it. Your pen remains a rapier at the heartstrings. I enjoyed.

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

Thank you, Fabian.
j.
I love the spacing and formatting of this, the way spaces can change the story is always so interesting to me, wonderful piece :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

10 Months Ago

Thank you for your words, nadia,
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..

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