a school of angry whales

a school of angry whales

gutted emotions

mutiny of feelings

the captain's calm

is truant

the heart is capsizing

while downsizing

one of the lifeboats

is missing.

erin-cilberto

12/27/23

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

brutal helplessness .. devastates life .. brilliant shot shot to the soul, this one, Jacob .. it impacts me .. a pressure like a heart attack.
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thanks so much for your kind words, E.
j.

[retreating ghost]

"the heart is capsizing
while downsizing "
Interesting words .This poem must have more than one interpretation which often the case with one from heart .

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Pick the one that works for you, ghost.
I think most poems have multiple meanings if both author and reader let them.
thank you,
j.

[Ken Simm.]

Interestingwhile all the words mention the nautical this has nothing to do with the sea, or whales. It is nontheless extremly profound in its manners.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such insight, Ken...well, you know my metaphorical mind probably better than I do.
thank you,
j.

[poetgurl]

Now this is a write, the heart is capsizing" I can see this as emotional.
I really enjoyed this write. Nicely written.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Meg,
j.

[NormaZ]

I can feel the emotions in your poem, the gutted emotions and mutiny of feelings. Very nice, I really liked the angry whales too, such great imagery.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the kind review, Norma,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

I relate this to politics where the public are getting fed up with broken promises while the leader is oblivious to it all.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah yes, thank you, andrew...
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Someone has jumped ship and got away in a life boat. There is now no mutiny on board.

I read whales as wails .

Very much open to interpretation. That’s what I saw dear j.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and they are certainly wailing at this point.

thank you, Chris,
j.

[Soren]

Jacob another jewel. Here the use of metaphor works so well.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Soren,
j.

[FGFRANKLIN]

This is open to interpretation I guess but we feel loss and the raked raw emotion of it. Your pen remains a rapier at the heartstrings. I enjoyed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Fabian.
j.

[nadia dmitri]

I love the spacing and formatting of this, the way spaces can change the story is always so interesting to me, wonderful piece :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, nadia,
j.