haiku #206

haiku # 206

 

bitter wind encroaches

trees flinch in abandonment

leaves become orphans

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/12/23

Reviews

[Patricia Wedel]

Jacob… You have captured the Crescendoes of Winter Winds in Summer Symphonies… softly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

How sweet of you to say, Pat...thank you.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Just too good J, brilliant.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, andrew,
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

Having been born very late into the Fall (December) I do like Autumn ... even the naked trees and searing winds. Button up and take it for what it is ... the prelude to winter and even worse weather. LOL

Sent a chill down the old spine with this one j.

Loved it.

I just noticed you actually posted this on my birthady. Coincidence???

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Happy Belated...
and thank you, Ted,
j.

[Mariej]

Oh, WOW! A very finely penned Autumn Haiku, so visual it paints an amazing picture of Fall. I adore how the poem tells the reader that the "leaves become orphans" as the older leaves are blown away by the sharpness of the wind. Love this succinct poetic gem, Jacob! Thank you for sharing...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, my friend.
j.

[Mariej]

Most welcome always, Jacob... Thank you again for sharing...

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

And so The leaves become motherless
And the trees childless
And the ground infertile

I love your write
Well done 👍

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really appreciate your reply...thank you, Julie,
j.

[schlanks]

I love reading your work because you choose your words so well. I'm watching the wind shake the branches of a tree outside my window, and the movement being described as flinching gives me a whole new perspective on it. Now I'm really feeling for the tree as I watch it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, schlanks.
j.

[June bug]

I love this, This is one amazing Haiku.
I can see some imagery in this as well.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, June bug,
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

I have been reading about this form and the most missing aspect to find information about is “the cut”. What is your take on its importance?

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it is the only form I write. I like the brevity...to minimize the number of words is a great challenge.

[W. Barrett Munn]

I like very much a description I read of haiku: there is something-then there is something

W

[Andrew John]

Nice to see a haik...
Oh, I've missed a syllable.
Must go for a hike!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Come back when you find it.

[Andrew John]

Oh, found it: u

[Kathy Mc Cathy]

To me , it speaks about how one feels change , it's reluctant and fearful . Change is inevitable like the winter season but always unexpected in its own ways . Lovely haiku with layered meanings . Wonderfully penned .

Kathy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Kathy,
j.