the lid is opening

the lid is opening

 

 

 

draw the curtains in fear

love is outside

the window of approval

our hearts in vampire fashion

repel the light of strong feelings

 

what's at stake is love

but the bold cross endeavors

to sever

 

so we wake

to a valid amnesia

 

introducing ourselves

to one another.

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/7/23

Reviews

[Amanda Reynolds]

So compact, so much feeling, love this!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Amanda,
j.

[MomzillaNC]

Love these lines:

our hearts in vampire fashion
repel the light of strong feelings
what's at stake is love
so we wake
to a valid amnesia
introducing ourselves
to one another.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Momz,
j.

[MomzillaNC]

YVW

Hope you're having a wonderful holiday season

[Ted Kniffen]

"the lid is opening" but the box ie empty ... nothing appears in the mirror but the reflection of a haggard face and tears. A cross can be too much to bear & in the throes of amnesia we introduce our selves over and ove, unable to settle on love.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really enjoyed this reply, Ted,
thank you,
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

Oh, those blood-sucking babes who only want to be loved. More garlic, Jacob?

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, better let me have a clove or two...thanks, Winston.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

What a great write. Yes love is out there but so is false hopes, breakups, shattered dreams. Safer to buckle down for the night.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

absolutely, andrew...thanks,
j.

[June bug]

draw the curtains in fear
love is outside
the window of approval

So do we fear what we don't see? Um maybe so.
There is some love out there but where I don't know.
Then I got to the part of amnesia I felt sad.

This is a really good write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, June Bug,
j.

[poetgurl]

I just love your first stanza, This very creative, much enjoyed

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Meg.

[Chris Shaw]

Such a clever write. Great title again. Fabulous extended metaphor J. Smiling at all the vampire references.

draw the curtains in fear
love is outside

Who would have thought that amnesia could be welcome.

Your poetry rocks. I just heard Lennon singing give peace a chance, or maybe that should be give love a chance.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, give love a chance.
Thank you for your kind words, Chris.
j.

[redzone]

oh, I love vampire love poetry, it never dies and never gets old!!!! er... once again I miss your intent as you talk of "light", "stakes", and "crosses", all the death of vampires, and love... I don't know, Jacob, sometimes, as I toss and turn in a bed of lonely, I wish for amnesia... much easier than constantly closing that coffin lid... one thing for sure, your pen is not dead...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Curt...you are a gem of a giving poet.
j.