minimalist poetry

minimalist poetry

 

 

 

in the softness of vulnerability

she advanced a hard smile

shadowing her weakness

for him,

eloquently denying

the plausibility of love.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/7/23

Reviews

[schlanks]

My favorite poetry is that which does not waste a word, where the weight is felt through each line to the end. This work is literary space well spent. Contrasting the soft vulnerability with the hard smile expresses the ruined moment with both efficiency and elegance all on its own.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, schlanks.
j.

[John the Baptist]

Plausible denial. Sounds like an old CIA practice. The person spoken of here uses it to hide her "weakness" for another. What she is actually denying is herself.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, John,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

How sad to deny the existence of feelings. I pondered on the why’s. This poem is beautifully conveyed J. So much said in so few words.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Chris,
j.

[Arundass TP]

Nicely expressed poem. Enjoyed reading

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Arundass,
j.

[Vol]

Ken,
How many times, do you suppose, La Belle Dame Sans Merci has been cloned? "Her hair was long, her foot was light, And her eyes were wild."

[jacob erin-cilberto]

many times I am sure,
jacob

[Sami Khalil]

Denials are hard to swallow or fathom; our minds need clues, our selves need assurances.
Short, powerful, meaningful poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Sami,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome sir J.

[Patricia Wedel]

Frank Sinatra sang… Softly as l leave you…
Elegantly said… dear Jacob… as you so poetically penned… tenderly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you so, Pat,
j.

[Cherrie Palmer]

A Beautiful piece of poetry. Smooth direct and elegant.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, dear Cherrie,
j.

[Stella Armour]

Too frightened to acknowledge her desire , but i know that feeling it comes from past hurt..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Stella,
j.