minimalist poetry

minimalist poetry

 

 

 

in the softness of vulnerability

she advanced a hard smile

shadowing her weakness

for him,

eloquently denying

the plausibility of love.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/7/23

Reviews

[schlanks]

My favorite poetry is that which does not waste a word, where the weight is felt through each line to the end. This work is literary space well spent. Contrasting the soft vulnerability with the hard smile expresses the ruined moment with both efficiency and elegance all on its own.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, schlanks.
j.

[albee]

Is “she” poetry? Could eloquent vunerabal denial be his to her?

Poems nailed to the wall, become discreet entities that may grow, like a new born babe grows in other’s eyes.

Peace, love, and joy with the poetry goddess.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, albee,
j.

[Maximus]

Excellent writing skills with unique selection of words to describe the affection she had for him.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Maximus.
j.

[Masked writer]

This reminds me of my current situation, thankyou for letting me reminisce in tonight's thoughts..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

That's a tough situation, for sure.
j.

[Masked writer]

indeed it is wise one.

[Ted Kniffen]

Hmmm! Not even a possibilty of love ... but only the plausability ... afraid I've been there.

Ted

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Too many of us, too many times.
thank you, Ted,
j.

[V]

The words are chosen well and make this little piece of writing feel on point > sharp and soft at the same time. Relatable to me.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, V.

[Stu. T.H.]

The roses that are able to grow on stones are most beautiful -- If one let their emotions mature first before entangling with another, that much is fine -- but often, when such sentiments blossom, not many spot an eye. And the beautiful rose will remains solely a sight, too distant away from reality. Beautifully written, author Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Stu.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

It’s all about the risk and whether she can survive the pain. The shield for all vulnerabilities to hold back at all costs.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew,
j.

[emmajoygreen]

Seems sadness and mistrust stand in the way of happiness here, jacob. Except- by way of the finest poem you have near enough turned negatives into an example of how to stand, be understood and unquestioned. Perhaps?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, em.
j.

[living lavender]

self sabotage. i know it all too well.
beautifully written.
{smile on.}

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, lavender.
j.