the semantics of being

the semantics of being

 

 

 

 

as the distance expanded itself

the we became me

 

and the you departed

the us a little engine

leaking oil

 

a cigarette out on the porch

you inside on a cell

lamenting to a friend

 

the miles became the we

driven away by two pronouns

that were never quite able

 

to replace the nouns

that once loved

being in a sentence together

as compound subjects.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/22/63

Reviews

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Great write loved this one
Especially these lines

a cigarette out on the porch
you inside on a cell
lamenting to a friend

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and it really happened that way, Julie,
thank you
j.

[Sami Khalil]

When you replace the nouns, love becomes sort of an abstract notion for it takes 2 to tango, to travel the distance, to win the race to the finish line.
I see Nascar poet/lover going round and round in circles, while the spectators wish he does not crash.
I love it!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I have crashed too many times, Sami...disappointed crowd.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe! You are welcome sir Jacob.

[andrew mitchell]

It just wasn’t a life sentence hence the breakdown. These days it doesn’t take much, we are forever changing and distance can start from the most smallest thing. Love the title, great read J. Another fav of yours.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, andrew for understanding me.
j.