senryu # 640

senryu # 640

 

walls crumble from bombs

the persecution of faith

redundant warning

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/18/23

Reviews

[Stu. T.H.]

The human elements are most withdrew in the work, implying that both those who cast the misfortunes and those who endure them, are drowned out by the inhumane elements. In war, do people seemingly become more savage? I think not, but the truth is, many had to succumb to the inhumane nature of the organizations, governments and political forces far greater than themselves, thus dehumanizing them into puppets stuck to the strings. In war, casualities should never lose meaning, the numbers shouldn't be just numbers, by understanding the lives lost, the potential future, happiness and satisfaction those lives could've achieved for themselves and how the world would've been with them... Then we may mourn.
The stark contrast between the seen and unseen elements and the way they complement each other are what make Senryu most renown as an art of expression.
A well-written tragedy, author Jacob. And I wished... such tales could have been just "tragedy", fiction.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

fiction...well maybe we will one day wake up from all of this finding out it was just a nightmare...
thank you for your words, Stu.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

A senryu of deep sorrow. Our world today. People persecuted. Thousands dying. History repeating itself. So much to think about when those walls crumble J.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Chris,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

The world is in bad shape right now. Antisemitism is at an all time high and it is scary. When we said, "Never again!" this is what we were afraid of. You really packed a lot into three lines, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Sad times, angry times!
Thank you, Lydi,
j.

[Desert Knave]

We really do not learn from history, do we ? Nicely done in limited syllables. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Jim...
and no we don't learn...same old same old.
j.

[AYVID N]

Walls crumble from bombs. With them crumble so many souls. This is so truly sad, my friend. Let's say a prayer for them.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, lots of prayers
thank you, friend,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

I was born in 1940 after a War.. and still we have destruction… I hear the Winds of times in your Lines. Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Pat...and I was born Ten Years After...
you...like the name of that rock group.read moreThank you, Pat...and I was born Ten Years After...
you...like the name of that rock group.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Gaza in a nutshell. Say no more.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes...
thank you,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Great write could be any war in any time of history

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and there are too many to name.
thank you, Julie,
j.

[Julian]

Powerful- so much captured in so few words, a perfect example of the depth of classical senryu!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

senryu are wiser than I am...
thank you, Julian,
j.