Aim

Aim

 

 

 

my rubber-band memory

elastically stretches far back

till it almost snaps

 

but a short pull

seems to leave it slack

when think back

to yesterday

 

or the last hour

or the one before that

 

I have a box of them

in my brain

and if I stretch them all at once

I get a poet thought

 

shoot it towards the page

but it lands limp, flimsy

part of my whimsy

 

but slack back off track

the theme dreamed seemed

a good aim then

 

then

last week?

yesterday?

and hour ago/

 

a minute?

now?

 

rubber bands last about as long as bubbles

from those little jars

we used to blow them into the air and watch them fly

 

now I blow poems into the air and watch them fly

 

they last as long as bubbles

or rubber-band memories

 

confounded, I tried to finish this poem

but I snapped.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/10/23

Reviews

[AYVID N]

Such an interesting poem. You are bubbling with poetry. This is such a great time for all of us, your readers. Your thoughts and metaphors are so inspiring, always.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am glad they can do something...Thank you, Divya,
j.

[AYVID N]

You're most welcome, dear Jacob.

[Maximus]

Extremely well written and very well presented, with the depth of your writing skills, I really enjoyed reading this poem which carries the effect of elasticity.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I feel stretched...thank you, Maximus.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

You know I love blowing bubbles with littje Jahkai to see how long they can last. Sadly short time memory can cause problems as we age, yet long term memory can stay. I love that elastic band stretching and then can be disappointed by the snapping. Here you have a slice of life and a comparison to the writing process which can be troublesome at times. I like the idea of poetry bubbles floating in air. Words carried in the wind to all parts of the world.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Chris,
j.

[John Sullivan]

There's a certain melancholy to some of your recent stuff, hope things are ok... Great piece though, all my best!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, John....just poetry...I am fine.

[John Sullivan]

Glad to hear it!

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

We will all snap in two if we think too seriously love this Jacob !

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Julie,
j.