If used, the rhyming should be such that it sways the flowers in the poem and deepens their hues, rather than crushing them. The imagery in this poem is of a gentle rain upon a flower and it was beautiful to think about.
The depths of a poem comes from the layering of images and emotions and this power packed piece is a perfect example of layering concentrated in a few words.
As you know I quite enjoy writing in rhyme, hopefully not to forced. I think it is the child in me remembering mum read simple rhyming poetry, when she had the time which wasn't often.
Good morning Jacob, hope all is well.
Posted 10 Months Ago
10 Months Ago
That has to be great memories of your mum reading to you...
thanks, Gee,
j.
My stuff hardly ever rhymes
I like to read rhyming and non rhyming
I like all writing actually
I love to read others and what they are thinking or going through especially if it’s about themselves
I love flowers too
Competing for the sun bending twisting exercising their right to sun water and earth
Loved your short write ✍️
Posted 10 Months Ago
10 Months Ago
I really love your reply...it is how I feel about writing in general...and most poetry...
I r.. read moreI really love your reply...it is how I feel about writing in general...and most poetry...
I read, I learn and I feel inspired, especially among all the wonderful poets on this site.
They have been giving me inspiration for around 14 years now.
10 Months Ago
I joined in 2017 it was just after I stopped 🥳🍷 so glad I came to wc and met such great writer.. read moreI joined in 2017 it was just after I stopped 🥳🍷 so glad I came to wc and met such great writers ! Like yourself included
Some like rhymes and some don't. To me, a smooth rhyme lends itself to an easier reading...A forced rhyme is...well, A flower growing in the wild, finding the rain helps it to bloom is far more durable than a green house flower forced to bloom to make a quick sale...they don't last near as long. Wow, sorry I got carried away Jacob. I enjoyed this.
Posted 10 Months Ago
10 Months Ago
I like your reference to green house flowers, for a quick sale.
thank you for your words, wil.. read moreI like your reference to green house flowers, for a quick sale.
thank you for your words, will,
j.
Apart from this brevity being visually pretty and the refreshing rain eventually allowing the flower to bloom perfectly, I thought about the place of rhyme in poetry. Both slant and full rhyme has its place, providing it is subtle. I don’t like forced rhyme. Internal rhyme is always a great tool to use in my opinion. A clever little poem J.
Chris
Posted 10 Months Ago
10 Months Ago
When you use rhyme it is natural...that is the kind of rhyme that gets near the poem but does not pi.. read moreWhen you use rhyme it is natural...that is the kind of rhyme that gets near the poem but does not pillage it.
j.
Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..