So many wasted moments, days, weeks, months and years, my life's spittoon must be almost brimming. A regurgitated life feels so sad. A very interesting and new metaphor you have here, dear Jacob. Public spittoons are a way of life in my country and always so stained with the reds of betel leaves and betelnut juice. Terrifying to behold. So this was a very strong association for me and of course I loved the poem for it.
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Thank you, Divya, for your kind comments on my not so pretty metaphor.
j.
I believe we don't realize the loss of wasted moments,untill we are heading to the end. I myself have felt this spite a few times. Especially when an important thing was on my responsibility and after doing that, I would always ask myself if I could do better. Human is naturally ignorant toward some crucial subjects.
Nima
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1 Year Ago
I guess we could always do better, Nima, but then
if we did everything perfectly the first ti.. read moreI guess we could always do better, Nima, but then
if we did everything perfectly the first time, life would be quite boring, I am sure.
Thank you.
j.
Life can get quite distasteful especially with
wasted moments..& hidden agendas, life sensed
but never savored as it were..great write .great
Metaphors as always ...nice work dear friend
Lift up the spitting bowl today to toast the next day ahead leave the past in the bowl crying over old spit never did any good
Loved your metaphors
I despise spitting
If I have to spit with a cold I do into a tissue could not imagine having a law that says spit here
Great write and metaphors
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crying over old spit...i like that...although milk tastes a bit better than a chaw...
thank y.. read morecrying over old spit...i like that...although milk tastes a bit better than a chaw...
thank you, Julie,
j.
What a journey life is. We have to navigate it as best we can. We will waste time, we will make mistakes but it is futile to beat ourselves up over it. Such an interesting metaphor here J. Reminds me of visiting China, where people spat in the streets frequently. Perfectly acceptable in their culture, repulsive in mine.
Chris
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and repulsive to me as well...But I would like to have visited China...interesting to see how folks .. read moreand repulsive to me as well...But I would like to have visited China...interesting to see how folks live in other countries.
j.
Another salient, sage write with impact. How many of us regret those wasted times? Love the careful word choice in this clinical piece Jacob.
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at my age now, I try not to waste any more moments....when I was younger I didn't know any better.read moreat my age now, I try not to waste any more moments....when I was younger I didn't know any better.
j.
So many wasted moments, days, weeks, months and years, my life's spittoon must be almost brimming. A regurgitated life feels so sad. A very interesting and new metaphor you have here, dear Jacob. Public spittoons are a way of life in my country and always so stained with the reds of betel leaves and betelnut juice. Terrifying to behold. So this was a very strong association for me and of course I loved the poem for it.
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Thank you, Divya, for your kind comments on my not so pretty metaphor.
j.
Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..