a chaw of possibilities

a chaw of possibilities

 

 

into the spittoon

of life

wasted moments, 

fearfully find their target

 

hidden agendas

drip from the sides

it's a repulsive scene

 

regurgitation

of life

 

sensed but 

never savored.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/26/23

Reviews

[AYVID N]

So many wasted moments, days, weeks, months and years, my life's spittoon must be almost brimming. A regurgitated life feels so sad. A very interesting and new metaphor you have here, dear Jacob. Public spittoons are a way of life in my country and always so stained with the reds of betel leaves and betelnut juice. Terrifying to behold. So this was a very strong association for me and of course I loved the poem for it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Divya, for your kind comments on my not so pretty metaphor.
j.

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Holy Shitsky, Jacob!

What a profoundly thought provoking write! ... You are a philosopher of Life lived in fullest essence of all that which it is ... And all that which we so wish it was, but never shall be ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Marve,
j.

[emmajoygreen]

Life is just that, always had been and worsens day by day. Maybe that spitoon of yours contributes load to our altered global weather, jacob. Who knows. Whatever, your writing as ever touches mind and interest. Many thanks for sharing, sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, em,
j.

[emmajoygreen]

You are always welcome, jacob

[Farjana Chaity]

Some moments and chances are discarded or overlooked, and they remain unappreciated.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, thank you, Farjana,
j.

[Crowley]

And It stays that way because no one wants to touch the thing. Ugly, putrid, ungainly. I can't fathom what basic reality is comprised of let alone the specifics touted as truth and justice. I am at a loss and not afraid to admit it. Does that make me woke..not sure what that means either. This makes me sad, angry, bereft.But well written mi amigo.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your thoughts here, Crowley.
I appreciate them very much.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Chaw is slang for chewing tobacco I heard so the write had me thinking of a western with gunslingers and bandits passing away time, wasting time, gambling with missed opportunities while chewing tobacco until they are written off because at the end of the day life is short.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Very short...some of us learn the hard way.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

My other take was we all chew on possibilities but never act on them until it’s way too late.

[John the Baptist]

The spittoon of life. That's a romantic image if there ever was one. Reminds me of the country song "I'm Just a Bug on the Windshield of Life." The spirit is similar. Wasted moments, unpleasant occurrences, regurgitation of life. This would have been a great number for George Jones.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

if only I liked country.
Thanks, John,
j.

[nadia dmitri]

Very beautiful, "sensed but never savoured" is such an impactful line. I love your format and style :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, nadia...
j.

[Tom]

One can never really obtain a thoroughly clean mouth rinse, always seems not matter how long the garggle, don't a few tiny little few unwanted consumables hang on in the crevices therein, yep, if ever there was a more appropriate endorsement to chew ( chaw, luv that word ) the fat before swallowing this is it, ldespite its initial sweet taste love sure can make us sick...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

This is an interesting take...love it.
thank you, Tom....
j.

[Tom]

Welcome Jacob, and sorrow about the grammar, typos, whilst enjoying the poetry here, I'm swallowing more that a pint or tow of Guiness, my bad 😌

[Andrew John]

Ah, many wasted moments in life - but not by reading your stuff, J. Thanks.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is very kind of you, Andrew, thank you.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

eeeeooooooowwwwwwwww! nasty spittoon ... a cauldron of boiling oil to spill out on the people .. i waste so many moments doing nothing these days .. i am in the trough of weary at the intersection of do something all day long ... hmmmmmmm now where did i put that chaw? fascinating write for me sir .. i lean toward interpreting it in the world of our so called politics these days .. disgusting exhibitionists
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, they are disgusting, aren't they?
Thank you, E.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

yep ... most all of 'em :(