Deliberation

Deliberation

the poem was acquitted

not enough evidence of meaning

the jury were all math teachers

didn't focus on verdict

just numbers on a clock.

erin-cilberto

8/19/23

Reviews

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Jacob,

Profoundly thought provoking lives that do more than suggest the essence of time running out ...

I do hope 'tis only muse's fiction ...

Marve

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, the muse's fiction.
thank you, Marve,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Loved your metaphors again Jacob

If the courtroom went up in smoke in a bomb or explosion
The maths genius would still be in a dream in front row calculating how many would escape the room and he’d be last along with the guilty or not guilty person in handcuffs asking if hed’done it !

The poet is free spirit he’d be the first leg and foot out the door he knows life is here today gone in ash

Running home to write the new story with a coffee on desk and plenty of fresh air through his faded curtains

Free spirit poet runs quickest
Though in somewhat slow motion

Mathematical genius walks doesn’t run and can’t see the dream of the poets mind

None of this banter is In any way directed at your dear Dad.

I loved all my maths teachers. One was middle aged mr pickerel In primary third grade renowned for his bad breath and mr zappia (Greek thick moed handsome God) all the high school girls had an instant love crush on him inc me !
Maths was my worst subject

My older brother in law a high school maths teacher later a form math master tried hard to coach me after school in high school he got exasperated with me with a controlled family patience checking his watch regularly
He told mum who paid him a meagre $ 5 back in the mid seventies I was improving. But we both knew better
Mum was pleased 😀
My older sister had better budgets to use that year
All in all after all said n done I still hate decimals
Do all poets hate maths ?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Julie...back then 5 dollars went a pretty long way?
I would hate my tutor to be checking his watch constantly...when my dad helped me, it took forever and I was the one looking at the clock.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Yes I bet you were watching the clock
Thanks 🙏

[Einstein Noodle]

what can i say .. just chuckling my friend .. i recall how abhorred i felt when people were first starting to use computers to make (math) music ... sheesh .. such travesty .. now keyboards have on board computers to set all kinds of musical accompaniment ... the wheel turns .. at least the poem achieved acquittal. .. still smiling on this one .. thanks for sharing
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I used to really enjoy writing poems in a notebook...and then banging keys on the old Underwood.
read moreI used to really enjoy writing poems in a notebook...and then banging keys on the old Underwood.
thank you, E.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

i can see you! ;)

[Alisa Js]

Aloha from Hawaii,

Such a cute and witty ditty to start the day! Thanks for sharing.


Alisa

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Aloha, Alisa, and thank you for the kind comment.
j.

[Alisa Js]

you are very welcome

[FGFRANKLIN]

It might be eating Humble Pie but hey, it didn't get ninety days in the hole. Are we convicted by meaning? Are we convicted by conscience?
Enjoy the reprieve says I. At least your poem isn't sweating it out on death row waiting that executive pardon. I enjoyed the read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

maybe a little of both, Fabian,
thanks for your clever response,
j.

[DIVYA]

Thank God and now the poem can breathe easy and enjoy being a poem. While they break their heads over uninspiring numbers! I’d rather be a poet anyday. The point you made is brilliant, my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I think I would, too, Divya,
thank you,
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

I'd say this adds up to an open and shut case. Was it a divided jury? Was it truly not guilty or only the equivalence of?

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Quite divided and too many days of deliberation.
thank you, Winston,
j.

[Tate Morgan]

Words move us But they dont follow logic they emotion. well put

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Emotion is more fun in writing than logic anyday.
thank you, Tate,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Reminded me of my Dad, who taught maths part time to increase the family income. He couldn’t teach me. All to do with the way the brain is. Scientific or creative. Yes it was all numbers with my Dad. I don’t recall him ever reciting poetry although it was his father who brought poetry into my life. A gift I have always treasured. Thank you J.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and my dad as well, Chris...all numbers and logic...not so creative in the arts. What he saw was what he saw.
j.

[Olita Tupou]

Is there more to this poem? the title was catchy though.
suspense and expectation when read this poem, and boom teachers and maths, it figures, one would say your life and it's direction would pretty much depend on your math teacher, if made an impression to love figures, become a business man, an accountant or scientist where everything demands evidence to support a theory, no grey areas, or if your math teacher was uninspiring, and one turn out terrible in it, but chose to make sense of the world in own journey as in artists, thinkers and yes, writers! who create their own reality and charter their own journey, and live a life of fulfilment, no empirical formula, but hard work, and deliberation is action

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Empirical is greek to me...I just write.
Thank you for your insightful review, Olita,
j.