Sentence

Sentence

 

your love

clouded my judgement

but the jury saw through you

 

They found you guilty

on two counts:

deceit 

conceit

thinking you were elite

and I was of poor, vulnerable heart

 

your sentence 

is to write five poems

of apology

to include in an anthology

by all of the women

who poemed a man

 

pervading

persuading

inviting

alighting

then 

 

deceiving

perceiving

 

the conquer met

it was time to let

 

her heart be freed from the boredom

find freedom from the humdrum

 

life she perceived

yet she was the one deceived

 

because his heart was pure

and he was the cure

for her restless allure

 

to search for what she would never find

the jury were aligned

and settled on the verdict

 

"We find the defendant worthy of 

being loved, and we order her

to write 

one more poem expressing her love for him

and do commitment service

until death do them part."

8/14/23

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

Judge jacob passes sentence. 'Who poemed a man' gets me excited when I read that. And I admit, I like your rhyme. This poem is found to be innocent of all charges in my jurisdiction. I like it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, William,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Yes we are all worthy of love but cupid is a bad shot! It’s a bit like only the good die young scenario.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and his arrows are often dipped in deceit.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy the poetry Jacob.
"pervading
persuading
inviting
alighting
then

deceiving
perceiving"
I did like the seven words above. Nice lead for a epic tale. Thank you my friend for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Coyote, j.

[Patricia Wedel]

The Verdict is in… a Life sentence of Poetry… in musical 🎶 moments of persuasion.. a Broadway Play with a flush of ❤️ Hearts.. gently, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a life sentence all of us can live with.
thank you, Pat,
j.

[Farjana Chaity]

what a wonderful poem, the unexplainable feeling of love, deception, perception, alluring. vulnerability and thirst for love, sadness for not getting the loved one. beautiful depictions...chaity.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Chaity,
j.

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Jacob,

Some women are damaged goods of dysfunctional before we have ever met them or known them to fall in love with them ... And then there are those who hold the water hose of washing away ever semblance of truth in use of using a man for that she can ... Such a sad state of affairs as far any relationship goes no matter whose true fault it is, because it ALL sums up as mentally emotion pain, for one, the other, or actually in reality of all fairness: Both ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yeah, on all that you said...thank you, Marve,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

I want justice for love, poetry settled in Jacob's court; I know he is fair and not biased. Other than a poet, I wish he could be a supreme court justice; he will bring some sanity back from extremes.
This was a powerful poem and verdict, sir Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

That Court "Don't Want NO Sanity" but they all think they are Saints.
thank you, Sami
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehe! So true and well articulated. You are welcome sir Jacob.

[W. Barrett Munn]

an interesting dialogue leading to the universal verdict: we are all worthy of being loved, even when our actions argue otherwise.

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, everyone needs and deserves some love from somewhere.
thank you, Winston
j.

[Robert Trakofler]

Oh, a perilous sentence indeed! If you saw the list of sentences I have yet to be written you would not be able to lift your pen or your fingers above the keyboard the weight of such manifest emotional inequity is such a lofty existence for this bunny

[jacob erin-cilberto]

bunny....Do you need me to bail you out?
I have a couple of oxymorons, two paradoxes that don't match, and an expired credit card I used to purchase some bad rhymes.
j.

[Robert Trakofler]

LOL, You may be getting one of those calls... you know with the warning announcement attached

[Betty Hermelee]

a beautiful metaphor for life and relationships, and very cleverly accomplished... no, we cannot deceit and/or conceit; they are not allowed....and if one is found guilty, write her a love poem and be COMMITTED!!!
Warmly, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I remember Diane Keaton in Manhattan...at the restaurant saying "I am great, I am Great, I suck"
read moreI remember Diane Keaton in Manhattan...at the restaurant saying "I am great, I am Great, I suck"
and then just falling apart.
thank you, Betty,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

I remember it too!