a crack in the sky

a crack in the sky

 

 

it is raining so hard

I am swimming in tears

rumbles of memories

always on the edge of the storm

 

the skies have no chance

to find sun

and the lightning

does too much more than

enlighten.

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/3/23

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the rain Jacob. A odd calmness.
"it is raining so hard
I am swimming in tears
rumbles of memories
always on the edge of the storm"
The above lines, I liked. Rain make my words come alive. Maybe teardrops to awake my soul. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, Coyote, an odd calmness. THat is a really good way to put it.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Reminiscing...memories tend to gang up on us at times. "The skies have no chance to find sun"....there are days the sun evades me and this line really hit me. Jacob, super metaphor and wonderful poetry! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Lydi...and sorry about that evasion by the sun.
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

Clouds of misery pouring confusion on the ground. The greatest danger to any one individual is their own thoughts.

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thanks for the read and the CCR reference to my favorite song of theirs.
j.

[Ken Simm.]

This is so sad it is wonderful Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Ken,
j.

[Pascale Dugarry]

Beautiful rythm. Thank you

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Pascale,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Some see the storms coming and take precautions, others don't have time to react for it happens like lightening strikes.
We need the rain but who needs the pain. What brews within will flash outside.
I love it!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there are times pain rains down on us before we do have time to react...thanks for your insight, Sami,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! So true and well articulated. You are welcome sir Jacob

[Stella Armour]

The heaviness of depression is such a dark burden when the only light is a crack in the sky that is not the light of uplifting thoughts you need ....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Stella,
j.

[DIVYA]

"rumbles of memories
always on the edge of the storm"

~ This is very beautiful to read and visualize. Memories rumble ominously and are wont to bring storms with them. Reading the poem, I felt how painful a past can be. Those flashes of lightning can sometimes be too much to endure. A crack in the sky can bleed so much.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Love that word "wont", and the word "shan't"--
Thank you, my friend,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

Thunder and lightning… the Sky is sighing as the Storm is weeping … for our World… to be a Haven where Children can laugh and become Heroes… and Heroine's Heaven…. softly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Pat,
j.