a crack in the sky

a crack in the sky

 

 

it is raining so hard

I am swimming in tears

rumbles of memories

always on the edge of the storm

 

the skies have no chance

to find sun

and the lightning

does too much more than

enlighten.

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/3/23

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

The lightning reveals our fears falling like tears. And if it's thunder our heart hears, closer or further than the light appears, it must be the memories we've shared for years.

billigami

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, sir...appreciate your extended visit and kind reviews.
j.

[red93]

'Everytime it rains / You're here in my head ...' Plenty of rain here in Bristol UK Jacob, even though the national newspapers keep predicting a heatwave. I liked this a lot - Excellent ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, red,
j.

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Jacob,

You have no idea just how poignant this piece of your wounded heart set to pen of page actually is to my life lived differently and concerning different people and circumstances, whilst filled with all too many wounds as pools of tears that never ever really run dry and flood to overflowing from time to time of remembering those times wherein Life chose to wound my own heart via events which I could not control, or sought to control in making matters worse as a sort of type of self-mutilation of my own damn heart in the process of that withal trying to survive this life ... Powerful words that left me feeling that downpour of drenching rain, and the electrical sizzle's ionization in the air that signals the painful jolt to come in a flash that always ends in reverberation's sensations of a terrifying thunderclap ...

Marve

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Oh geez, sorry, Marve...didn't meant to cause painful feelings.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

The sky is cracked and the rainfall is heavy. It won’t rain for ever. Eventually a shaft of golden sunlight will filter through to find you. Beautiful, though sad dear J.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Chris,
j.

[John the Baptist]

If you could set this one to rhyme, you'd have a first rate country music song. I'm so lonely I could cry.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a little B.J. Thomas maybe?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am hearing that lonesome whiporwill....

[Lorry]

I am swimming in tears, because the sky is cracked. Not long woke up and opened the door to check the weather. My foot figured it out before I did, as I sloshed in the puddle, but the rest of me quickly woke up after that!
I just hope my soggy slipper pulls through. 😊
I hope a sun filled day is on its way to you my friend, to brighten the picture a bit more.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it is still storming here...will be sloshing most of the day, I imagine.
Thanks, Lorry,

[willweb]

If love fell from the skies, dark or light, the weather wouldn't matter at all. Sad it seems, to feel the pain of emptiness. Funny that empty can feel like something, but it does and trust me, a bucket filled with tears does nothing to change it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, will,
j.

[NormaZ]

Wow, so much said in your short poem. I love the comparison of the tears and the storm. Very effective.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Norma, for your kind words,
j.

[Andrew John]

Tears, rain; skies, sun; lightning, enlightening. I like this, J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Andrew!

[emmajoygreen]

Whilst the weather can dictate human moods.. we can only accept what it gives, sends: in this case, sadly, sinking behind and before the dawn. Words to ponder, jacob .

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, dear em.
j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Love the avatar..I like all the reflection in it, much like a deep poem.