the days of daze

the days of daze

 

 

Judy crush

her desk

a note in class away from mine

her smile

a note in a song I imagined

 

her beauty

a memory

from a distance

a note in class away from mine

 

she almost knew I loved her.

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/15/23

Reviews

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Yes we passed notes in school and I recall one year writing words in pen under my jumper sleeve for an exam. I felt bad but they all did it never did that again !
Reminds me of the song living next door to Alice
Enjoyed this Jacob esp the last line

[William Michael Reeves]

Those shouda's and coulda's in life. If she only knew ...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Never got a chance to have a laugh with her over it...cancer got her about 15 years ago.
thank you, William.

[FGFRANKLIN]

This one reminded me of the gentle days in school when the boys and girls passed notes and hoped they didn't get caught. Why is J. Geils Band, Angel is a Centerfold now playing in my head? Those old school crushes were the best, feeling the anticipation of a smile or a glance. I enjoyed the read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, they were, Fabian..
thank you for sharing that Idea of J. Geils...mmmm

[emmajoygreen]

Your words, your poem, sails the winds of time, jacob. There is charm, delight, adoration between each meaning, each letter, each memory.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind, kind review, em.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Those girls we adored and they knew. Nice journey into kind memories Jacob. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[W. Barrett Munn]

This reminds me of me, standing outside a house for hours trying to figure out how to talk when crushes mother comes out and asks me if I want to see Moen; I panic, say no, and high tail it home. I was 10.
Brought me back, Jacob. Nicely written.

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Did you finally talk to her when you were 11?

[W. Barrett Munn]

Nope. Never did.

[duff]

Recollection lane. This is pure nostalgia. Early love in a class forever. Her beauty caught you. Nice work Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, duff...
Yes....I wish had had a chance to tell her about it, maybe we have had a good laugh.

[John the Baptist]

Has the sound of high school to it, and "a memory from a distance." She was the girl you longed for, but had no way of communicating it. Who knows what that note might have said? Who knows if she knew? Ah, the trials of adolescence!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

actually a grade-school crush....she never knew...I was too nervous to ever approach her about my feelings...but I did get to do a doubles skate at a roller rink once....I still can feel the rush it was just skating and holding hands.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

makes me smile, Jacob. my first love was Rosemary Scott .. in 6th grade (i think) .. i wrote her a love letter in invisible ink i bought at Ed Guth's Toy and Hobby Shop in Up State .. me and my buddies were following the girls home shortly after that and she confronted me about writing it in lemon juice ... of course i denied it and that was the end of my infatuation daze ... great poem .. simple and real .. love reading
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I wonder if Judy and Rosemary might have been friends...was she mad that you might have written it?

[Einstein Noodle]

no ... she just wanted to know, i think ... girls have always been more mature and honest than i, about such things .. her friends were quietly giggling .. to this day i am left to my imagination

[Lorry]

Ahh, young love, eh? Everyone has a Judy to remember. Mine was a Jennifer... It must be a J thing with us guys, err Jacob! 😊
I remember her smile like it was yesterday and barely remember her without a big beautiful smile on her face.
I'm sure she almost knew I loved her too, but ever since we went to big school at the age of eleven, have never saw her again.
But that's the price we paid for growing up in an Internetless age, without mobile phones and constant connection in your pocket.
But why do we miss it so much if its the answer to all that ails us?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I love that we grew up in the internetless age...
thanks, Lorry,
j.