the band

the band

 

 

Brilliant Beats

deconstruct the norm

flare ups of homogenized

pasteurized writing

 

into untouched milky freedom

the words build their own castles

in the humid air of ennui

 

moats created of unrhymed water

gators keep their own beat

they thrash and snap lines for the times

messages of reptilian skin

cutting and biting

 

the poems have matter

close the gates of tyranny

bring the soldiers home to rest

 

another war, another iambic wound

signs for blank verse

filling in the spaces

 

Brilliant Beats

pound the drums

gently.

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/5/23

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

So many great lines in the poetry. After we live a long life. We learn to accept and need less. I will read the poetry again Jacob. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Coyote,
j.

[FGFRANKLIN]

The avant-garde of yesterday is the familiar and mundane of today. Ginsberg once howled into the wind and the pack came running but even the angel-headed hipster has traded in her tie-dye and jeans for business slacks and a secretarial career. ee was right, old age sticks. What is the "beat" of today? I wonder because it seems a great many college grads can't seem to articulate their thoughts into cohesive sentences. Is originality dead?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the hippies became yuppies...and yes, Fabian, I am afraid originality has gone dormant.
thank you,
j.

[FGFRANKLIN]

I remember turning in a college paper in World History long ago on Hammurabi's Code and having my professor praise my writing for "original" thought and perspective. She called it "refreshing". I was concerned more than pleased because I thought that my fellow students were also attempting to apply critical thinking. She told me that most of her students just wanted to get through the class and had no real interest in the subject matter. How can anyone hope to achieve greatness settling for the mundane or repetition of rehashed content? There was once an intellectual thirst for ideas and originality or perspective. I think the beats represent that nonconformist application. Today, "average" or "passing" seems to be the zenith of accomplishment for many. Sad.

[John the Baptist]

Sounds like a nod to those writers who flourished in the post WW2 period and became known as the Beat Generation. They rebelled against conformity, wrote in a new way. Ginsberg, Kerouac, Burroughs, etc., all long gone now, but they left their mark.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

they sure left their mark...and especially on me...
they influenced my pen to start moving back in 1970 as I read them all in my Modern American Poetry class.
j.

[light and ashes]

Do great feet walk upon the earth gently or is it more so that they walk with purpose? .....
or just mostly of good will? ....

After all, none of us are angels..
even the most Saintly among us.

Intriguing write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate your slant on this one, thank you for your intriguing thoughts...
j.

[light and ashes]

You're very welcome..

[redzone]

there has never been a time when America's war drums were silent, except for a brief time in your youth when we refuse to fight their war... some of us who refused heard those BEATS of poets, their lines of "matter" sounding out our discontent!!! today, in the words of Springsteen, "the poets down here don't write nothing at all, they just stand by and let it all be..." except for the poets who "pound the drums gently".... perhaps we need to pound them harder and louder and taking then into the streets!!!

Poet Jacob, your poems oft times invoke my imagination to beat loudly!!! Thank you!!! My drum is strapped securely and I am heading out to play.... cool peom by the waay!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Curt...and your poems tell it like it is...you are a strong voice...the ones we need...someone has to express the discontent.
j.

[Soren]

Rhythm an often neglected element of poetry it throbs beneath the surface like a drum, giving meaning to the melody of lyrics. Very nicely done and indeed it was beat gently.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Soren,
j.

[Stella Armour]

i get mixed images here my friend from jazz music to tyranny, from perfection to blankness and then the sound of gentle rhythm returning to normality ...
You know my friend how i struggle with metaphor .... :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I think you have it just fine, Stella,
j.