a sound

a sound

 

 

one glance

one Titanic glance

the bow

they bow

then

 

eternity enjoins them

all of them

and someone in a museum

dusts an artifact

and wipes away a tear.

 

 

erin-cilberto

6/23/23

Reviews

[Stella Armour]

Doomed .. right from the start.
The tragic Titanic should never have been disturbed and left in a peaceful grave ....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it does seem that way, doesn't it?
Thank you, Stella,
j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

My tribute to honor the Titan was a senyru, and somehow fails in comparison to this. Such an extraordinary piece of work, Jacob! This is what I refer to as "poetry with a pulse".

[jacob erin-cilberto]

no no no, Kelly...that was a wonderful senryu tribute...your writing is always deep and emotional.read moreno no no, Kelly...that was a wonderful senryu tribute...your writing is always deep and emotional.
thank you for your kind words,
j.

[Kelly Scheppers]

Thank you, J. A very happy 4th, to you and Hank! Is he afraid of fireworks? Mine are so scared by them.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha....Hank is a girl...
Her real name is Viola...I named her after Gwenyth Paltrow's character in Shakespeare in Love. Remember? sHe had to be Henry in order to get the part of Romeo in his play.
So, she is Hank for short. The really Twilight Zone aspect of this is that the day I got Hank, she picked me. I was holding another kitty to take home and Hank jumped on my shoulder and said take me. At the shelter they give the kittens temporary names...the one I was holding in my arms to take home was named Gwenyth....spooky eh?

[Kelly Scheppers]

It's funny, how well we remember meeting our pets, like being introduced to someone for the first time. I believe cats and dogs are sensitive to people and situations like that, they just know. And I'd be willing to bet she doesn't even mind being called, Hank! Good one, J. Thanks for sharing!

[W. Barrett Munn]

This is the best Titan poem I have read and would require a Herculean effort to surpass, maybe D.H Lawrence could but the count is one handed.

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very kind words, Winston,
thank you
j.

[light and ashes]

Beautiful. Amazing. Outstanding. Phenomenal. Abstract. Emotionally deep. You have really out done yourself. I didn't know you could get EVEN better.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are very kind, Light...
j.

[Akinlolu]

Tragic. How many times do we leave home unaware that death was only a step or a block away? Those divers understood the possibility of dying during their dive into the deep. But I'll bet that in their final moments, they'couldn't have envisaged that death was a breath away. People die for different reasons. We are angry at the loss and we blame those whom we think should have been more responsible. However we also understand that death sometimes leave the most careless and takes away the innocent and the most circumspect.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and that is long it lasted, a breath or lack of one...so fast.
such tragedy.
thank you, Akinlolu,
j.

[duff]

I honestly believe it was quick and to some degree they knew the possibilities. Discovery and exploration is never easy. Tragic for the families.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, never easy...they knew the danger.

[Dave Brown]

the hidden blessing here is that if it had to happen, the tragic result was over in an instant

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, an instant...thank goodness.

[Coyote Poetry]

The deep sea isn't kind Jacob. Amazing and worthwhile poetry shared my friend.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

No, quite unforgiving.

[Betty Hermelee]

It took one second of ear-splitting sounds and then silence and the pieces were scattered on the ocean floor; a disaster of the worst kind; with prior warnings that it wasn't safe enough; now it lays like pieces of dust...floating beneath the ocean's currents; yes, this tragedy will be remembered like the Titanic's exhibit in NY.
Best, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I haven't been to NY in so long...where is the exhibit located?

[Betty Hermelee]

14th st and sixth Ave..you can google "Titanic expo"
They extended it because it was so popular!!! lucky when I was in NY in Mat it was still there
Best, B

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... the song, "Nearer my God to thee" was played as
lovely people prayed... We all will sleep some day...
in Waves of Heart-beats ... thinking of the Poet Keats and others
who inspired so many with their Gift of love and devotion.
gently, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, and some sooner than they expected.
Thank you for your words, Pat,
j.