Extra Napkins

inspired by reading Chris and Andra and others tonight, late night. Thank you, folks!

Extra Napkins

it's pretty poetry time

the flowers are budding poems

wishing to bloom

into gorgeous metaphor

the colors befitting things that aren't what they are

but what they want to be

if given the personification to change their hue

it is like

like

like

similar similes smiling

with meanings that have an aroma

like coffee

just poured

on the page

to make a poem

Oh, that's a metaphor isn't it

but gorgeous?

Probably not

and it burnt my tongue

should have used more cream

or more adjectives

I need another napkin

to wipe up the spilled description

from my chin.

erin-cilberto

6/18/23

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

This one is super duper! "similar similes smiling" The alliteration is so effective here. Coffee spilling on the page...I wish words would flow as easily! I so enjoyed this one. Lydi***

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and I don't even like coffee...:)))
thanks my friend.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

the flowers are budding poems
wishing to bloom

All poets wish their poetry to bloom, however it is penned. It may be sweet smelling, it may be like coffee without the cream, but variety is all important.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Chris....and good morning.
j.

[AYVID N]

Words can be stark as coffee with no cream. Its so good to read you today, dear Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Divya, nice to see you around this sunny morning...you make it sunnier!

[AYVID N]

Always such a pleasure to be around and reading you, my friend! :)

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Your writing has always enthralled me. You take the most routine and turn it into the most majestic metaphors. Only you write this way. I know of no other. You inspire by example, always. Great job.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really appreciate that, Lynda Marie...
thank you....
nice timing, too...we were reviewing each other at exactly the same time.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I noticed that. Thank you, Jacob.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

‘should have used more cream
or more adjectives
I need another napkin
to wipe up the spilled description
from my chin.’

Beautiful write Jacob
Clever metaphors
Above is my verse of fave choice

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Julie,
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I love this. three metaphors in one poem.
Yes we as poets are creative seeds that grow More than one style of bloom.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Dale...appreciate your comment.
j.

[JessyJacob]

You are an elder person, and you know how to guide and encourage, i see why you take care a poor girl who scored more than 94% say congrats, how does it matter your hearty congratulations to her , but i see how much you care for poor people who do hardwork, for that matter you are at top position in my eyes. But i do see you are encouraging the poets who are disgustingly get misleaded and writign whatver it comes to them, and you are not giving constructive feedback, instead you are making htem to write more of such kind of provocative poems, where people are blindly enthralled for no reason. If you cant even respect your own majhab, what is the basis of your life. why you are not being stable in your point of view and basis, why you are spoiling people minds, noone is so sensitive that may get damaged in their life, every one is so smart, when they are so smart in getting rid of blocks or girls or boys in their life, dont they know what they are doing. You please stop putting encouraging comments to them. Else serious action of protecting their souls i will take care how to stop them writing bullshit poetry. Please dont feel offended.