Thief

Thief

 

 

 

the gems of justice

tarnished jewels

confiscated and replaced

with counterfeit amazement

diamonds once pure

cut to the quick

serrated edges cut the legal system

in odd sketches

 

like poor plays

that sound good to a blind audience

the jurors will be folded

into his pocket

Location of the stolen property

that once showed a balance of truth

 

the judge is connected to the sentence

a dangling participle

with leanings

let us proceed

 

there is the greater good of the country

to aspire

as we threaten to hire a madman

and liar

 

to lead us into oblivion

even worse than the smithereens

we have already seen.

 

 

erin-cilberto

6/14/23

Reviews

[duff]

The tongue lashing exposes a broken trust. I love the attitude in this. Nice work Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, duff,
j.

[Akinlolu]

A vicious swipe at the legal system but I guess it's a well deserved attack. Those who pay lip service to justice while manipulating the system to their own advantage ought to hang with their partners in crime. Reminds me of Animal Farm by George Orwell: "all animals are equal, but some animals are more equal than others". A damning indictment of the judicial and political systems. Mind you this isn't just about America. I believe the political criminals in the United States have to be more subtil because your law has the potential to work. In my corner of the globe, there are tin gods who brazenly break the law, embezzle trillions and oppress the commoners without any fear of repercussions. A hard hitting message but universally true.
Akinlolu.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really appreciate this review, Akinlolu...
yes, it is everywhere...and I like your reference to one of my favorite, but scary novels...Where is Napoleon now?

[Akinlolu]

LOL. I guess it's the million dollar question.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Think he ended up on someone's plate?

[Akinlolu]

They always do. Tyrants always end up victims...of others or of their own devices or of circumstances.

[Soren]

Cynicism has reached the point that I now believe that there is no truth, that liberty and justice are just human concepts only as good as those in power. That freedom is only a state of mind and that reality is a constantly changing vision. How is that for being jaded? Is this what society and age does to us? Some great metaphors here "the judge is connected to the sentence a dangling participle"

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Soren,
j.

[John the Baptist]

Never trust a dangling participle with leanings, especially if the defendant nominated her for the job. I wonder if it is possible for a sitting president to serve time on weekends.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Don't we wish?

[carl]

yep that is the truth the whole truth and there is very little of it left. Seriously, I firmly believe this is the time in history (perhaps not the first and hopefully not the last ) that truth will cease to exist. Big Brother is just ahead, I fear.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

1984 again in 2024...uh oh...Heaven help us, carl.
thank you for your visit and insight,
read more1984 again in 2024...uh oh...Heaven help us, carl.
thank you for your visit and insight,
j.

[Soyam]

It tackles a pressing issue with honesty and conviction. The way you use metaphors, such as "tarnished jewels" and "counterfeit amazement," is both thought-provoking and relatable.

It's evident that you're passionate about justice and the state of our legal system,

captures the frustration and disillusionment many of us feel when faced with corruption and injustice.

The message is clear and resonates on a personal level. Well done for bringing attention to these important issues through your words!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Soyam,
j.

[Lorry]

I am leaning towards this being an American someone, but judging by our days breaking news about our ex pm being found to be a complete liar while making us stick to lockdoon while he partied, the best I can come up with is, I'm pretty sure it's a politician 😊
They are so sure they are above us and the law, while they wriggle away beneath our feet.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

if yours fits, then he can wear the poem as well. thank you, lorry,
j.

[light and ashes]

I can not help, because of your word choices to be reminded of Libra, the zodiac sign, or rather what Libras are supposed to be, but most often are not. Strong word usage and excellent writing.

97

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Light,
j.

[light and ashes]

You are very welcome!

[Andra Dare]

Evocative juxtaposition of metaphor and plain language. I like. And I agree.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Andra,
j.

[Ken Simm.]

I completely understand this feeling of dread. To a lesser extent but still there in our leaders, (just gone) but then everything in your place affects the rest of us don't it. What I cannot understand is the people not only allowing but hoping for.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

That is what I cannot understand, either, Ken.
thank you,
j.

[Ken Simm.]

What does he have to do to go?