Love Poem

Love Poem

a beautiful accident occurred 

the day we met,

your beauty ran into my eyes

and then your voice scraped

the fender of my heart

and we laughed and exchanged

assurances of love

later exchanging vows

and living under one policy

some beautiful cumulus 

and accident forgiveness

neither of us 

felt we needed.

erin-cilberto

5/16/23

Reviews

[The_Ancient_Rock]

Very good...

Enjoyed it very much...

A love poem... as real as it should be...

;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ancient Rock
j.

[The_Ancient_Rock]

You are most welcome, friend.

;)

[willweb]

The old, "Met by accident" line or the "Guess who I ran into today?" Pretty cool Jacob, the damaged seemed minimal from this "heart on" collision.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, will,
j.

[Lorry]

Love is always accidental Jacob, in my opinion at leat. I have never been out on the town and thought "tonight is the night." More often than not it is when we are distracted and someone bumps into me or we make accidental ete contact in the most unusual of places, in a queue, bookshop or when you look up from a book on the train to see what the next stop is and eyes meet in that Kodak moment way you know you'll never forget.
The one time I've served on jury duty I kept it going longer than needed because of another juror. We hit it off in the hotel we were staying in and I eventually caved, once we exchanged some saliva and phone numbers. (he was guilty as sin anyway) 😊
Ahh, young love! We even booked into the same hotel a few times afterwards, despite her living in the same area. 😊

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is certainly a Kodak moment...thanks for sharing, Lorry,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

What an engaging and lovely poem J. Accidents happen, but how wonderful that as a result of one there should be such a positive outcome. Your first stanza is truly knock out. A beautiful poem. What’s that old expression, love is never having to say sorry. Your stanzas had me drifting in that direction.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Ah yes, from "Love Story"....Ali McGraw telling Oliver..."Love is never having to say you're sorry"---
thank you for your words, Chris.
j.

[Pax]

Wow, love occurred in mysterious ways. Beautiful accidents with good results are quite rare now a days. Often it works and most does... It's an occurrence many wish like how mericle happens once in every lifetime... Beautiful, simply beautiful my friend....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Pax...
j.

[AYVID N]

I can understand why forgiveness was not needed. We are just grateful for some accidents. They change our lives so beautifully.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

quite grateful...thank you, Divya,
j.

[Neville]

a beautiful accident occurred
the day we met,
your beauty ran into my eyes ...

I must use your above lines sometime jacob .. rarely have I encountered anything with such pulling power .. and whatever happens afterwards has got to be better than a ...

N.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Neville...if you do use it, I hope it works.
j.