Two Drifters

Two Drifters

 

 

invert the love poem

reverse the feelings

stone cold collaboration

heart and pen

the page is lavender

but the ink frozen

into black ice.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/2/23

Reviews

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Is the ink the love that’s gone frozen on the lavender pretty stationary
That stationery was the romance the love affair the newness of the romance
Maybe we just need pink glasses and a cup of pink lemonade will that fix it the romance
Probably not

Enjoyed this one Jacob
Ps I love the song too

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am quite fond of pink lemonade...
Thank you, Julie,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

That’s good
I haven’t had it since my kids small

[willweb]

I understand the meaning of your poem though I do not understand why it becomes like that. The way I see a relationship and love is...it almost always starts out with a friendship and evolves into something more. When it end, why can't it just evolve back into the friendship it once was? The friend part worked great, the love part, not so much. Though this "ink frozen into black ice" I have seen on here before. It definitely brings a chill.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful review, will,
j.

[Corset]

,,," off to see the world
There's such a lot of world to see
We're after the same rainbow's end
Waitin' 'round the bend
My huckleberry friend
Moon river and me

and I love this poem for obvious reasons..two drifters indeed.

[Dave Brown]

It sounds as altho these two drifters are going in opposite directions, they may eventually end at the same end of the rainbow

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"Wider than a mile" that gap gets.
Thank you for your words, Corset....and thanks Dave.
read more"Wider than a mile" that gap gets.
Thank you for your words, Corset....and thanks Dave.
j.

[Dave Brown]

excuse me Corset
I entered my comment in the wrong location
Maybe I just did it again
Technology technology!

[Corset]

lol, no worries, it feels like were having a conversation :D

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Dave,
Since you dropped in, can I get you a beer? :)))

[Dave Brown]

what will you be wearing

[W. Barrett Munn]

Fascinating and imaginative way to describe the hardening that occurs when love turns to resentment.

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Winston...sometimes the words just fall into place the right way...for me, lots of luck involved.
j.

[light and ashes]

Fanastic and amazing, jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Light,
j.

[light and ashes]

You are always welcome..

[duff]

"reverse the feelings"
Black ink frozen in ice. Texture and smell. I really like this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, duff,
j.

[AYVID N]

Black ice felt so uncomfortable and so inhospitable. There are no redeeming features to it. I hope the ink thaws soon and sheds it blackness. I wish you more lavenders and minimal blacks, always.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thanks for your words, Divya,
j.

[Lorry]

This is pretty much how I feel whenever asked to collaborate with someone on a write.
My ink freezes into black ice at the thought and the collab always ends up on a stone cold slab.
Perhaps some of us are just not meant to share 😊

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I think that is quite true...I cannot collaborate...just never works for me, especially because of my writing process...I write in bunches, and am just a conduit...they come, I write them...
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

When I walk down our red brick path of Lavender blue...
I stumble and fall ... now I am black and blue...
forever true blue when dew becomes the essence of you...
Amen... Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

You are so poetic, my friend.

[Patricia Wedel]

Thank you Jacob…. Pat

[Chris Shaw]

Lavender and black ice. What a contrast J. The former, gifting summer, sweet smelling and alive with honey bees. The latter a car crash in cruel winter. The world is full of opposites. Light and dark.Warm and cold. We need both. In this piece of brevity there was a strong pull on the emotions.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much for your words, Chris.
j.