Celebration

Celebration

 

 

 

the raft splurged on the champagne

just before the cork was pulled

and a resolute life

drained from its reaches

and capsized.

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/22/23

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

This is no celebration J. It appears to be a disaster. A raft in troubled waters. Maybe a metaphor for a relationship doomed to fail. This one is a puzzler dear J.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are spot on...thank you, Chris,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased I read you well J.

[AYVID N]

The celebration seems doomed...It was all over before it even began. The quest should have been one of survival rather than celebration. A raft should save first. An interesting poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, should save first....thank you, divya,
j.

[AYVID N]

You are most welcome. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Feel like a Titanic story Jacob. I would be the cook with the high class whiskey floating in the sea in a inner tube. Maybe true, maybe lies. Only two survived drinking and waiting for their death. A interesting poem. I wanted to know more.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you Coyote...
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.