blot

blot

 

 

too many erasers

never allow a poem 

to be written,

we would love to let the ink dry

in cursive apropos

 

because the spirit of the pen

is thoughtful remorse

but we don't want

to be sorry for our vocabulary

 

we just want to get to the end of a line

without smearing our brain

all over the page.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/23/23

Reviews

[Wondering Mind]

Talk about genius expression!
' without smearing our brain all over the page'

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, W.M.
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

No luck. My leaky brains drips all over the line dancing two stepping sons of a gun…see?

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, I see!
j.

[andrew mitchell]

I’m becoming a hoarder of my thoughts just in case I forget.😉 To be saved for improvement!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like that analogy....

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

we just want to get to the end of a line
without smearing our brain
all over the page.

They were my favourite lines
Loved this one ☝️
Happy Easter

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you and Happy Easter, Julie,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Sometimes poetry can be such hard work. Yes it can be painful to get to the end of a line. It doesn’t always flow easily. Your first three lines resonated. Sometimes the words are drip fed. Blot blemish erase. There are alot of if onlys with poetry. A poet’s write J and an excelente one.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like that.."drip fed"---thank you, Chris,
j.

[AYVID N]

Dear Jacob,

Indeed...

"without smearing our brain
all over the page."

~ Loved the line and am in whopping agreement. Getting to the end of the line should not be this painful. Need to let go of that erasure and in my case, the backspace key.

If only we'd let the ink dry. Brilliant!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, divya,
j.

[AYVID N]

Its a pleasure, my friend.

[willweb]

That sounds about right. I can't tell you how many times I was inspired, I wrote and then when it asked if I wanted to save it I said...nah.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I hear ya on the "nah"!