Witness
A Poem by
jacob erin-cilberto
Witness
rival
serials
same
block
same DNA
it's the
urge
to ruin
to
murder love
it's a
wino
watching
from beneath an awning
Yawning
to sleep with his bottle
thought
he saw something or some things
someone
or some ones
that
bottle's throat clutched with dirty fingers
like the
ones she never saw coming.
erin-cilberto
3/30/23
© 2023 jacob erin-cilberto
Reviews
A series of sad tales Jacob. Sometimes, we cannot win. When the whiskey is our final friend. We are alone. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote
Posted 1 Year Ago
1 Year Ago
thank you, Coyote...
j.
1 Year Ago
You are welcome Jacob.
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I wonder if the serials mentioned are in fact serial killers. Perhaps they do share our DNA, meaning in a lot of ways they're not so different from the rest of us. The wino saw something but was too drunk to realize what it was. There was no way he could have helped the woman who died.
Posted 1 Year Ago
I wonder if the serials mentioned are in fact serial killers. Perhaps they do share our DNA, meaning in a lot of ways they're not so different from the rest of us. The wino saw something but was too drunk to realize what it was. There was no way he could have helped the woman who died.
1 Year Ago
and they blend in, don't they?
thank you, John,
j.
Scary. This echoes the state of...well...a bunch of cities right now. California comes to mind most of all. Cities are falling apart. The homeless are dangerous. And I see no end in sight.
Posted 1 Year Ago
Scary. This echoes the state of...well...a bunch of cities right now. California comes to mind most of all. Cities are falling apart. The homeless are dangerous. And I see no end in sight.
1 Year Ago
yes, lots of decay in the cities, thank you, Relic,
j.
Jacob,
Very profound and though provoking writing set to pen of page here that all should heed and learn from ...
Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham
Posted 1 Year Ago
Jacob,
Very profound and though provoking writing set to pen of page here that all should heed and learn from ...
Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham
1 Year Ago
life can just be cut way too short...thank you, Marvin,
j.
I like that, dark, dirty and dangerous.
Posted 1 Year Ago
I like that, dark, dirty and dangerous.
1 Year Ago
thank you, will...
j.
Sounds like one of the tv shows about crimes, and your final line is nicely disjunctive.
Winston
Posted 1 Year Ago
Sounds like one of the tv shows about crimes, and your final line is nicely disjunctive.
Winston
1 Year Ago
only not from a tv show in this case...
lived it.
thank you, Winston
I had to read,go back and read again I'm at loss of words as your write because I can't say whether Can say if it's a good writing but keep writing
Posted 1 Year Ago
I had to read,go back and read again I'm at loss of words as your write because I can't say whether Can say if it's a good writing but keep writing
1 Year Ago
thanks, Mauricio...I keep on trying.
j.
1 Year Ago
If it could get better
Amazing
The climax at the end a shock to the reader
Love it
Posted 1 Year Ago
Amazing
The climax at the end a shock to the reader
Love it
1 Year Ago
thank you, Julie,
j.
This is so different from you J. Packs a punch and that final line literally is the killer. Watched it play out in eerie black and white.
Chris
Posted 1 Year Ago
This is so different from you J. Packs a punch and that final line literally is the killer. Watched it play out in eerie black and white.
Chris
1 Year Ago
thanks Chris...you understand how hard this was to write.
j.
1 Year Ago
I do and not only that I felt a shiver running down my spine.
The dirty fingers around the bottles throat...this packed such a punch. The end crept in unsuspected, unexpected and so insidious. Loved it!
Posted 1 Year Ago
The dirty fingers around the bottles throat...this packed such a punch. The end crept in unsuspected, unexpected and so insidious. Loved it!
1 Year Ago
Thank you divya....you know where it came from.
j.
1 Year Ago
Yes and its amazing!
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jacob erin-cilberto Carbondale, IL
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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po..
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