Witness

Witness

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto


Witness

 

 

 

rival serials

same block

same DNA

 

it's the urge

to ruin

to murder love

 

it's a wino

watching from beneath an awning

Yawning to sleep with his bottle

 

thought he saw something or some things

someone or some ones

that bottle's throat clutched with dirty fingers

 

like the ones she never saw coming.

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/30/23

© 2023 jacob erin-cilberto


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A series of sad tales Jacob. Sometimes, we cannot win. When the whiskey is our final friend. We are alone. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you, Coyote...
j.
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

You are welcome Jacob.
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I wonder if the serials mentioned are in fact serial killers. Perhaps they do share our DNA, meaning in a lot of ways they're not so different from the rest of us. The wino saw something but was too drunk to realize what it was. There was no way he could have helped the woman who died.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

and they blend in, don't they?
thank you, John,
j.
Scary. This echoes the state of...well...a bunch of cities right now. California comes to mind most of all. Cities are falling apart. The homeless are dangerous. And I see no end in sight.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

yes, lots of decay in the cities, thank you, Relic,
j.
Jacob,

Very profound and though provoking writing set to pen of page here that all should heed and learn from ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

life can just be cut way too short...thank you, Marvin,
j.
I like that, dark, dirty and dangerous.

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you, will...
j.
Sounds like one of the tv shows about crimes, and your final line is nicely disjunctive.

Winston

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

only not from a tv show in this case...
lived it.
thank you, Winston
I had to read,go back and read again I'm at loss of words as your write because I can't say whether Can say if it's a good writing but keep writing

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thanks, Mauricio...I keep on trying.
j.
Mauricio Montoya

1 Year Ago

If it could get better
Amazing
The climax at the end a shock to the reader
Love it

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thank you, Julie,
j.
This is so different from you J. Packs a punch and that final line literally is the killer. Watched it play out in eerie black and white.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

thanks Chris...you understand how hard this was to write.
j.
Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

I do and not only that I felt a shiver running down my spine.
The dirty fingers around the bottles throat...this packed such a punch. The end crept in unsuspected, unexpected and so insidious. Loved it!

Posted 1 Year Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

1 Year Ago

Thank you divya....you know where it came from.
j.
AYVID N

1 Year Ago

Yes and its amazing!

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..

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