pick-up game

pick-up game

 

 

i was a redundant excuse for love

you use vocabulary succinctly when you want to

 

so i knew you were the tautology

to pull my emotions so taut

they broke

 

i snapped pledging my alliance

with you,

 

and then the truce

repeated the satire

 

and i indifferently

played the fool

 

because i had nothing better to do.

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/22/23

Reviews

[FGFRANKLIN]

Sometimes we're just left to pick up the pieces when there may be very few pieces left to pick up. I've been there a time too often. I sometimes feel like I've made a habit out of starting my life over. Now here I am in my sixties with a young child and a third wife after raising one daughter and divorcing two women. No more starting over for me, though. I'm like a cat climbing a tree from here on out, all four paws and claws dug in for do or die. They say the third time's the charm. They may be right.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I hope for you the third time is...wasn't for me...but that is how it goes...and you really do sound happy these days...and content...that is so important.

[W. Barrett Munn]

It’s ok to be the fool if you know it. If you have nothing better to do.

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, Winston, you are right....and this means that I have had nothing better to do, A LOT!

[Chris Shaw]

you use vocabulary succinctly when you want to

The imagery that one line gave me was the opposite. I saw a her spewing forth a torrent, a constant torrent or maybe she didn’t speak at all , such was the rift.

Whether too much or too little, the she here broke the bank of emotions. Left it empty.

Excellent piece. So much said in a short poem about relationship breakdown.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and on top of everything, she cleaned out my savings account as well.
thanks, Chris

[Lorry]

Love this Jacob. "I indifferently played the fool, because I had nothing better to do."
That alone could be my autobiography in twelve words. 😊
A pulled tautology does also sound like an excuse I gave my swimming instructor once and as for it being called the pick up game, I'd reply" What? Not with a torn tautology I can't! "😊
Excellent.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

funny about the swimming instructor....
thanks, Lorry,
j.