rough drafts

rough drafts

 

 

i used to like Bukowski

till i ran into him in a tavern

 

one night in May

over drinks 

he read a few of his poems

 

then tossed down a final beer

walked out leaving me to pay the tab

and those dreary poems

 

each one more bruised

than the other.

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/22/22

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

Wow now this hits home, I was a kid I would put words together later in life I would hang in bars it wasn't until I was drunk i would recite that's when they stop listening it wasn't til I join this site I took poetry serious but I still write simple, I love you work because the words you make me think.
Thank you for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Mauricio,
j.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Good write.
Thank you.

[Light and ashes]

Damn, he was a messed up man, but anyone would have to be to write a poetry book equating love with Hell.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

bitter people can be great writers, or not.
thank you, Light.
j.

[Light and ashes]

Absolutely, unfortunately, even some sick people are/have been.
I wish it weren't the case, but it is so.

[John the Baptist]

I read his "Open All Night" collection earlier this year. I'd say he's an acquired taste.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, very much so...and one I never acquired.
thank you, John,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes Jacob. Bukowski didn't see life as pretty. He lived on the dark side and he liked it. Hard to digest Bukowski words. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Coyote...
j.

[Miss Sharon]

Never cared much for his writing myself. (A cult hero, Bukowski relied on experience, emotion, and imagination in his work, using direct language and violent and sexual imagery.) Not much of a man or writer in my opinion. I'd much rather read a Mr. Jacob Erin-Cilberto!~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you Sharon...that is kind...I was never really fond of his writing or him...but I know he has a tremendous following.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Be it poets, singers,actors and or painters it’s funny how these people are not nice in real life. Great write , the last two stanzas are so clever made me smile at the audacity you portrayed so well.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew....i never have believed that being an artist allows for the individual to be nasty in real life. Nope...never believed it.

[andrew mitchell]

I just think they are nasty to begin with.

[AYVID N]

Bukowski is a fascinating character and many people seem divided over him. I haven't read him yet but I have read he was an abrasive character. This poem tells me he was and he didn't hide his bruises well. I'm sorry you had to suffer him even if just within the poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and those females who knew him couldn't hide theirs...thank you, DIVYA,
j.

[AYVID N]

I don't like that. Poets should be gentle of soul...
You're welcome Jacob. Have an awesome day.

[Kelly Scheppers]

You met him? Wow, I love the quote he wrote about his beer drunk soul, being sadder than all the Christmas trees in the world. Do you remember what year it was? How fascinating! Good poem, btw!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh no, made that up for the poem...wouldn't want to meet him...thank you, Kelly,
j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Don't remember the year...

[Chris Shaw]

He’s always had a huge following but I have read about his drunkenness and rudeness and I can do without that. I know you aren’t a fan of his either J.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, can do without him very nicely,
thank you, Chris,
j.

[willweb]

Often those in the limelight are nothing more than a shining example of how not to be. I like this little group, so much talent, very few arseholes. Nice one Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, how NOT to be. thank you, will.
j.