Poem

 

 

Poem

 

 

a speck of confidence

like dandruff on a dark suit

is exposed

 

and shooed away

with a thimble full

of doubt

 

then a stranger

comments on our tie...

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/14/22

Reviews

[JD Major]

Ah, yes, when Doubt battles Confidence, it's often a tie.
I enjoyed this Jacob, thanks :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, JD,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Nice work J. There are many facets to a poem which are all vulnerable to criticism, the structure, the meaning, the content, the popularity of the writer all from the readers and that’s well before whether the author is happy with it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I seldom like anything I write...I know what you mean.
thanks, andrew.
j.

[John the Baptist]

Apt metaphors here. With all the hostility in the air these days, it is easy to feel shot down by the chorus of critics. But to cite an old cliche, what doesn't kill us makes us stronger.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I don't think that saying will ever be cliche.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Define a poem Jacob. I believe can be anything. Us, who love to write. We want someone to enjoy our work. Nice dance of words my friend.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it can be two words long or 20 pages...or just graffiti on the side of a building...
thank you, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[AYVID N]

Confidence is so frail and fragile and always vulnerable to well muscled doubt. Takes little to upstage it.

Such amazing imagery of confidence you created here! Loved it!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, DIVYA,
j.

[AYVID N]

Always such a pleasure! Thanks for sharing all the amazing poetry!

[Ciara]

We wear our vulnerability on our sleeve and hope the comments are favourable.
I like it. 👍👏💛

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh those sensitive poets...thank you, Ciara,
j.

[Perdition]

Perfect title and perfect description. You broke the rule of law and succeeded, my fingers red from snapping...no one uses that word as a title unless there's a ceiling of madness upon them. Nice tie by the way... hahaha. Wonderfully Inspiring as always!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I have a very low ceiling of madness...
thank you, Perdition,
j.

[willweb]

That's why I shy away from dark suits...I don't have the confidence to wear them for fear of what might be seen and ties...nope, not for me. Confidence is a shaky ladder to climb sometimes. Get high enough and you can see forever but, often what you see can knock you straight back down to the ground landing with that ladder on top of you. Me, I prefer to remain humble...I don't need confidence, I know I am nothing special. So when someone comes along and says..."Hey, you're nothing special" I can reply, "Yeah, I know!"

Very cool Jacob, as is everything I see flow from your pen.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, will, and to tell you the truth, I don't own even one tie.
Not a suit kind of guy...
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

This is why I stay at home - no strangers.

Where does one find confidence? Is there a confidence confectionary? I don't mean to kvetch but confidence seems confined to the confident. a curious condition, no?

I wonder daily, is this any good; have I ever written anything worthwhile? And I don't even wear a tie.

PS: I think a retitle is in order: Carbondale Kid Crushes Confidence.

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes our family can give us that lack....and then failed relationships reinforce it.
I like your title...thanks, Winston,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

That speck of dandruff on a black suit is a bummer but a compliment on the choice of tie can be so uplifting. You can also apply this to poetry. Nitpicking isn’t pleasant . Can send confidence into a nose dive.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I have had too many nose dives.
How are you tonight, Chris.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Trying to keep warm J. Minus 8 at the moment! Just a bit chilly.