Vanishing into Light

Vanishing into Light

sarcastic heartbeats

aloof venom

poison persuasion

i loved her till i burst

with passion,

then like a twisted symmetry

the shape of love

rewound the wounds

and i disappeared.

erin-cilberto

11/29/22

Reviews

[willweb]

Sadly, the shape of love is not a "One size fits all" proposition. The right fit isn't always guaranteed regardless of how it feels when it is on you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and sometimes we might just want to be happy we even get to try it on at all.
thank you, will,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

I think love is a shape changer! I can see the unwinding....great imagery. When the spark ignites, it can burn badly. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Lydi,
j.

[John]

The poem suggests that trying to shape and gain a perspective in the wake of love is almost self-defeating. You've mentioned Dickinson earlier. This poem expresses the opposite to After great pain a formal feeling comes. There is nothing formal or distancing here. The I disappeared is a cri de coeur, a forlorn wish or hope in this self-lacerating piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John,
j.

[AYVID N]

The shape of this love was all wrong.
It just forced open old wounds and love fell into a gaping chasm.
Twisted symmetry sounded so ominous here...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, DIVYA,
j.

[AYVID N]

You are welcome.