Quietly Deleting

Quietly Deleting

 

 

the talent is missing from the gut

of it all,

the heart finds solace

in real meaning

not contrived empathic element

 

there is a facade of beauty

and facsimile of it

a need for it

but the verification

is a counterfeit sonnet

a bearer of unsubstantial bonds

 

i keep swinging at the keys

but missing the point

drained economy of words

less is less than

what i am feeling 

in this poem

trapped within the lines

a tumultuous void 

an esoteric abomination

 

i can no longer hit "save"

and mean it.

 

erin-cilberto

11/24/22

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes Jacob. I have writing for 53 years. I wonder if our words have any meaning?
"i can no longer hit "save"
and mean it."
I am listening to the talk of the four murdered college kids in Idaho. Make me want to go to my 180 acres of Ojibwa land in Upper Michigan. And seek peace. Room for you too Jacob. We must write my friend. Maybe someone is listening?
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, so many mass murders...
I feel like we live in Whitechapel.
thank you, Coyote,read moreYes, so many mass murders...
I feel like we live in Whitechapel.
thank you, Coyote,
j.

[softlyfall]

I met, in my youth, two serial killers...having grown up in the California Bay Area where they flourished in the 70s and 80s and 90s. One was famous, Joseph James DeAngelo. The other was Thor Nis Christiansen, who actually murdered a very good friend of mine the day after he picked me up hitchhiking and, for some unfathomable reason, let me go.
I don't know how to stop psychopaths but all people should be taught to defend themselves. So there, my friend, I am writing it down, in case it helps.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh my God, Amy,
that is so scary...Was Thor executed?

[Nisreen]

The idea of anything being genuine and true is worth discovering
We are meant to say or write all that is truth
Otherwise we can’t save and we shouldn’t share what isnt really true and felt within

Great one J

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Nisreen.

[Ken e Bujold]

well captured J. every writer's worst critic is themself. in times of crisis i still consider the PC to be the worst enemy of our existence. the ease with which I can edit, shift words around, and restructure entire verses is not always a godsend. the constant tinkering all too often leads to the existential crisis, "is what I have transcribed really worth the Save, or just a delayed delete.

feel it, and for you my friend
ken

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you understand, for sure, Ken,
thank you for your words,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Very emotional write. We splash our emotions on the page and sometimes they are misconstrued, but they are felt....and that is what is so important. I think we are our own worst critics. The words you write are well worth the save, my friend. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, I believe we are, Lydi...I do believe we are.
Thank you for your understanding review,read moreyes, I believe we are, Lydi...I do believe we are.
Thank you for your understanding review,
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

It still amazes me that it was a sports writer who is credited with saying writing is easy, all you have to do is sit down and open a vein. If it doesn't feel personal to you, it won't feel personal to anyone else; however, this poem did because everyone at times feels this disconnect - the veins need to heel from repeated stabs, perhaps. It is a deep dig required, and I am only on the first or second shovelfull.

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am going to open a ventricle soon...
and that is personal...
I will look for that deep dig...
thank you, Winston,
j.

[Robert Robbie Lord Dudl..]

O the void thru
O the discontent
O the Winter is turning back to,
A-time.
That ain't for paints
O' I follows the sunshine
Saved by my papers
Made in a-speeding airplane
P.S.
T.S. 'Tis a-good welcome mat at that

[jacob erin-cilberto]

paper airplane poets...
fly low and fast.
j.

[red93]

Some Poems take an age to finish, to get them just right. It is the same with Poetry Books. Fortunately with Amazon EBooks there is an 'Unpublish' facility if a Book needs further Work. Personally I like to have good material in reserve so that one can spring a surprise on the 'Listeners'. A couple of times I have widely rewritten EBooks and republished them with a different Cover and Title. The beautiful flexibility of Amazon Kindle Publishing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, some poems do.
for sure.

[Patricia Wedel]

There are no Words for what is happening to our Beautiful World… the suffering and pain is Evil. Will Prayers overcome and become our Saving Grace. gently, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I don't know, Pat...I just don't know.
j.

[AYVID N]

A very relatable poem for me. "a tumultuous void " Felt so often.
The façade, the facsimile of beauty is not essential. Honesty of words matters more. Be it ugly to write. If no meaning or purpose is felt then its time to introspect and perhaps take a break from writing rather than dishing out insincere and contrived words. Because when one hits "Save', one should mean it absolutely !

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, poets write about the ugly, the pain, what is really happening...and if we don't..."delete"--read moreyes, poets write about the ugly, the pain, what is really happening...and if we don't..."delete"--
thank you, DIVYA,
j.

[AYVID N]

Yes I agree!
You are most welcome dear Jacob!

[James Paranormal]

Dam, that is just a downward spiral, hurts to read, beautifully tragic, a whirlwind romance, of yesterday, crafting the poet of tomorrow.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Ghost...like Plath said..."readers want to know from someone who has been there and felt the worst"---thank you,
j.