burnt toast

burnt toast

a percolation of thoughts

unscripted cream

in my coffee cup

caffeine rush of superfluous semantics

chosen,

carefully like a second napkin

to wipe away the smudges

on the edge

of lips

not bold enough for speak

but mouthing the words

as the pen searches

for sugar.

erin-cilberto

11/22/22

Reviews

[willweb]

Often even caffeine is not enough or perhaps it is too much. The rush to write, the need to create sometimes flows at a better pace when we embrace the toast for what it is...a slice of life, burnt or not. Really cool my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nice insights, will....thank you for your understanding review.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This, along with Chris Shaw's coffee offering, "A percolated Poem" makes me think the two of you are writing to a prompt. I liked the phrase "superfluous semantics" but more than enough meaning is better than none at all, eh? When I want some sugar for my pen I write my wife love poems. (laughing) I guess it's coffee season. I drink it every day year round. Nice poem. I enjoyed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I bet your wife enjoys those poems.
I hated the one sip of coffee I ever had...but it is good fodder for poetry.
thank you,
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

I agree with Ken: opening stanza is killer.

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Winston,
j.

[Ken e Bujold]

by times your hold on metaphors leaves me breathless and a little envious. Unscripted cream is one of those moments

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Ken,
j.

[AYVID]

caffeine rush of superfluous semantics
These are very relatable words to me....The pen always thirsts more sugar.
Perhaps, like an addiction...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very much so....you are spot on as usual.
thank you, DIVYA,
j.

[AYVID]

You are welcome, dear Jacob!