whisper

whisper

 

 

 

give me as many today's

as tomorrow will allow

vast mileage

to learn

and then die

with the secret

 

as if I were the only one

who knew

and then selfishly kept it

from even, myself.

 

 

10/28/22

Reviews

[Weeping willow]

Nicely spoken as whispers hid within themselves to speak again ;-]

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, willow,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

This is poetry Jacob. Me and you are older and we know. Love can be twisted. When love is near. We believe. Then we learn. Love is a dance of young hearts believing in forever. There wasn't no forever and thank you my friend for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes a dance...and one I jumped onto the floor to engage.
thank you, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[AYVID N]

This is so deep and speaks many things to me...
The secret of learning and living life in the present.
Of filling it all in the present with no thought of tomorrow because tommorow doesn't exist.
The punch comes in the concluding line.
The poet doesn't want to share the joy even with himself.
Indeed, how often we spoil it for ourselves...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your understanding review, DIVYA,
j.

[Brianna Brie]

ive me as many today's
as tomorrow will allow
vast mileage

Ooh a secret. I wonder what it might be. I love the lines above very creative.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Brianna,
appreciate your thoughts.
j.

[Elaine]

Brief and yet filled with so much! One of the biggest questions of life - one of the most sought after mysteries we wish to solve - one of the most universal wishes we all have tucked in our hearts. I appreciate how you write jacob and how your writing makes me feel. Thanks for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Elaine,
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

This seems to me to consider the question of whether we would want to know the date of our own demise. I think if you live it right, then knowing is unnecessary. As Joe E. Brown said, “You only go around once, but if you do it right once is enough.”

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Winston,
j.

[Melinda McQueen]

This is an adventurous read.
I read it twice as it deserved a second read.
Nicely done.
MMR

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Melinda,
j.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I venture to say that everyone reading this will stop and think. You have the blessing of being able to say so much in so few words. In this case, I think Buddha said it best: "If it comes, let it. If it goes, let it. Don't be attached, and you'll find peace."

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Buddha knew.
thanks, Linda,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

You are losing a battle with life; called aging... and must squeeze everything, including learning as much as you can quickly before you go...there must be a special secret, but you can't even remember it, because perhaps your memory is gone....we never know what tomorrow will bring....so hurry and express and learn today....well done J.
Best, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate your insightful review, Betty,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome dear mentor!!!
Best, B

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

We must expresser feelings now for tomorrow may not come.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Dale, your reply reminded me of the Credence song "someday never comes"---
j.