the first and last frost

the first and last frost

 

 

 

 

in a maniacal fall

i wept

you were the turning leaf

expiring into cold ground

 

seasons envelop hearts

when friends find more comfort 

letting go,

 

than painfully articulating

how to bear a winter's immaculate snow

 

reason is a tear

on a cheek

that lost its faith

 

humanity is a Titanic drop

drowning in frigid sorrow

 

i tried to catch you

but God's breeze

kept you just out of reach

 

now i sit by that tree

imagining what could have been

if the seasons were fair.

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/21/22

Reviews

[Stella Armour]

" painfully articulating

how to bear a winter's immaculate snow"
It's hard to do that when you are already shivering with the cold ..... so sad ... so beautiful .

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Stella,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Relationships are like seasons you may get four in one day always changing as are memories looking back can bring all different seasons of emotions if that makes sense be it happy or sad with regrets.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew,
j.

[Katrina Mckeown]

A hauntingly beautiful piece …

Humanity is a Titanic drop
drowning in frigid sorrow …

A tear on the cheek that’s lost it’s faith…
this line had a tear in my eye…

Powerful write j with great imagery.

Katrina

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Katrina,
j.

[Gee]

Early spring we remember not then as we blossom into summer we race along with racing hearts and raging hormones, these then tempered by autumns arrival and all of our adult lives responsibilities which then lead us, mostly, as pessimistic cynics into a winter of regrets and maybes :)
Hi Jacob, hope you are well

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Gee,
j.

[Lorry]

Moods do change with the upcoming changes of seasons, which may explain why Scotland has at least fourteen different seasons in one day and our temperament changes as often as the Uhm... weather.
"Reason is a tear on a cheek that lost its faith" is a great line. It almost made me cry, which I didn't because it would freeze and give me frostbite, as it snows in @#?!%£ September!!! Pfft! 😊

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lorry,
j.

[John the Baptist]

The fall of leaves makes an interesting metaphor for the fragility of relationships. Indeed, in this age of transience, many would rather be blown away than to try to make it through the winter together. We just have to remind ourselves that spring will come again.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John....you just seem to get me...digging under the layers.
j.

[Kim S.]

reason is a tear
on a cheek
that lost its faith

Wow! So touching yet so sad, This is just one deep write.
Almost made me shed a tear or two,
Emotional, enjoyed the read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review,
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

Loss is bitter. My brother once told me, there is nothing good about death. I have to agree. The sense of loss in this work is palpable, like winter wind.

Winston

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your understanding review, Winston,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

If the seasons were fair. Life isn't fair J. This is a superb piece of poetry. Left a lump in my throat and a tear in my eye, so you did.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Chris,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

My friend Jacob. This is poetry.
"i tried to catch you
but God's breeze
kept you just out of reach"
The above lines. So strong and so beautiful. Our heart will have many seasons and if we are lucky. In the end. We can find love kiss.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.