a look deep

a look deep

 

 

 

my poems

don't understand me

they are confused by my sad countenance

even as I am chuckling loudly

over life

 

my poems 

are troubled by my recklessly mundane

existence

the path worn

scenic but same

 

my poems

hint of something inside trying to get out

but I am baffled by their treachery

giving away the secrets

I don't want to share

 

my poems

find their way to the page

with or without me

giving them passage

even as I am chuckling loudly

 

they write me

when I least expect it

I am taken aback

by the affront

 

do you see my poems?

they won't let me,

perhaps they let you?

 

turn away if they are too personal

I can only advise

not steer 

your attention

 

to or from my poems.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/13/22

Reviews

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

My poems laugh at me
They look at me as if I’m stupid me as if I’m bonkers mad
Good write Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are not stupid or bonkers...poems can be wrong.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Lol
Partners ?? I read him stuff he doesn’t get it I tell him you don’t need to understand it lol

[John the Baptist]

It must be frustrating when your poems don't understand you. Still, don't complain; at least they are still talking to you. Mine have been giving me the cold shoulder for the last week.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I hate that cold shoulder thingy....what nerve they have doing that.

[W. Barrett Munn]

I mentioned in other reviews that I read an inmate’s poem and his bio said he had been given the advice to write what you are afraid to say out loud. I think you have that part under control.
W.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate your words, Winston...this was written for a poet friend who was told that her poetry was too personal and the reader couldn't read it.
She is really good, and I think the comment was out of line...it shook her.
this person had been an old college friend.
If there isn't personal along with universal...it ain't poetry.
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

Again, just passing along an author’s words who wrote (paraphrasing) that the issue is to depersonalize the personal so that the reader isn’t embarrassed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and I think my friend has that under control as well...poems not deeply personal from where they originate emerge flat...But yes, I agree with you you on the idea of making the poems universal enough so that others may relate.
thank you, Winston,
j.