on the subject of poetry

 

on the subject of poetry

 

 

sea

sky

sand clouds

poem

 

see

sky

sans clouds

poem

 

writer's hourglass

sky's the limit

ideas hit the throttle

invade space

warp speed thoughts

of sea

sky

clouds optional

tears not

love not

pain not

 

carriage ride

the typist's overt ego

intercedes

sans sense

sans feeling

sans free verse swinging

 

see?

poetry

clouds hover

tears

pain

love

wait in shelter

until it all passes

 

then look up

to see words

like fallout

drop from the sky

as cynics

look up

and deny.

 

 

7/31/22

Reviews

[light and ashes]

I love your subtle use of words here. How you so cleverly exchange them for other words throughout the poem that change the meaning slightly. Brilliant.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate your kind words, light,
j.

[light and ashes]

Always welcome.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

You capture the idea of inspiration my friend. So very eloquently and in such an educational manner for the reader. To find and understand their own art. Are we truly meant to? Or do we live in art? Does it exist because we do? Or does it exist without us? Beauty is in the eye of the beholder, but in the mind of a dreamer gives form and symmetry to the sublime. Another wonderful poem J. Thank you for always sharing your work and the creative artistry which inspires.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you understand my work better than I do, Carlos...
thank you for your review,
j.

[Robert Trakofler]

You know brother Jacob, I really like this and strangely enough, I have been thinking of the definition of poetry a lot lately. I am beginning to think its not a set of words anymore nor a set of rules or forms or even writing in general:/ I am beginning to think it is an action... a way of being and it translates into myriad reflections like the cascade of words you describe falling from the sky:) what a perfect analogy

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes...a way of being...and words just falling into place or out of place...but still being.
thank you brother Bunny,
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

There are bo such things as fences or walls when it comes to poetry for inspiration cannot be fenced in, it is meant to run backslid.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, I know that I backslide a lot
thank you, Dale,
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

What a pleasure to read something so well crafted, that leads you through like a stream following stones downhill.
Congratulations, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you so much, Winston...I almost threw this one into the poetic trash bin.
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

Been there, done that.
W.

[Earthrise]

This feels like lightning in a bottle. The one-syllable lines hit hard, and the message is powerful, too. I get the sense that while writing is hard, and can come with a cost, it's inevitable. It always comes back to us, and is always powerful.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it always comes back to us...hangs on to us like bulldog holding on to a cuff...
thank you, Earthrise,
j.

[Robert Haigh]

"Poetry" is a very broad church, with room for anybody wanting to write creatively. As with any art form, one man's meat is another man's poison, and one man's ceiling can be another man's floor! We all have our preferences, but I do try to tackle different poetry forms, and engage with free verse too. Expression and good use of language are what poetry is about, to me, although I do like a good piece of light verse with comedic content also. We may feel jaded at times, and wonder if we have anything left to say, but such feelings pass, and we are soon ready to write again.

A good, creative write, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I think you peeked into my head, Robert.
These are my sentiments about poetry, Exactly!!!!!read moreI think you peeked into my head, Robert.
These are my sentiments about poetry, Exactly!!!!!
thank you for your words,
j.

[Neville]

wow .. (now there's an exclamation I rarely use) .. as far as the subject of poetry is concerned, this sir, has just about everything required of it .. an intro and conclusion with subtle hints (maybe not so subtle) of just about anything and everything the individual scribe may desire, or feel obliged to place on paper .. N.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really appreciate your kind review, Neville,
j.

[Red Brick Keshner]

Language is probably the last individual bastion even if it is oftentimes the first of liberties to be targeted. Poets are the sentinels of language and not merely its beneficiaries, and there is an unspoken call for each of us to make provision for this liberty to be prolonged. Thanks for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, I agree, the last bastion...we have that power still...poets speak out and hope someone besides another poet might be reading...
thank you, Frederick...
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

"I want more than a touch I want you to reach me
And show me all the things no one else can see
So what you feel becomes mine as well
And soon if we're lucky we'd be unable to tell
What's yours and mine, the fishing's fine
And it doesn't have to rhyme, so don't you feed me a line
But you...
Why you wanna give me the run-around?
Is it a sure-fire way to speed things up?
When all it does is slow me down" John Popper/ Blues Traveler


Eh, "Write what you know" as Sam Clemens used to say and if somebody shares the feeling, well write about that too. Of course if nobody shares the feeling you can call that "originality" and "poetic license". I always wanted to get myself a poetic license. I wonder if they offer courses in "Writer's Ed". (laughing). I had the expository and the creative but not the defensive writing course. I probably should have taken that one. I finally figured out where Sebastian the crab in The Little Mermaid is from. My wife said Jamaica and I said, No. He's from Virginia. She asked, "How do you figure that?" I told her it's in that little song he sings. It clearly says he's "under D.C." Her eyes rolled so hard. :o :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate this response...thank you, Fabian, I think I took a few defensive writing courses.
read moreI appreciate this response...thank you, Fabian, I think I took a few defensive writing courses.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

At seminary they call those "apologetics". It always sounded like they felt guilty for something to me. (laughing)