surfing the edge of reality

surfing the edge of reality

 

 

it's an apparent 

insurrection

emotions cannot be interred

 

they resurrect in disbelief

stampede from hearts

congealed in rebellion

 

the coup a fire

her eyes conspire

i join forces

 

an ally

in myth

or an accomplice

 

in a yarn spun

with knotted dreams.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

6/26/22

Reviews

[redzone]

one of the many thoughts I had while reading this wonderful poem Jacob, is that emotions may not be interred, they can be tempered and steeled so that when they erupt the target is science/reality based and not fantasy/myth/conspiracy based... a genuine revolution is neither coup nor insurrection/rebellion, it is the conscious act of millions with a clear strategy and goals that benefit the vast majority of people... might does not make right and the way we fight has to be consistent with the goals we aim for....

what happens when a dream is too long differed??? as Langston Hughes wrote, it explodes.... let's work to make sure that explosion gets rid of the oppression and horrors people face....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

That is such a great poem by Hughes...I teach that in my classes....I agree so wholeheartedly with your last line...
j.

[keith]

you got that right ... reality is a yarn spun
but the coup is not she, but an angry morphydite
a good thought provoking write this is

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, keith, appreciate your words,
j.

[John the Baptist]

Apparent insurrections are often the product of knotted dreams. An ally in myth, I guess, is better than no ally at all.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I suppose that is true. Thank you, John,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

My mind is always surfing and never to good places Jacob.
"they resurrect in disbelief
stampede from hearts
congealed in rebellion"
I did like the above lines. Our rebellion minds, always fighting things we cannot win. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome, Jacob.

[W. Barrett Munn]

Chris is right: you could subtitle this A Metaphor.
All effective. Well done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Winston, appreciate the kind remark.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

What a great title dear J. Surfing the edge of reality. I am loving that title.

emotions can not be interred, how right you are, as long as you are living anyway, and your second stanza is awesome. Whether in grief or love, they can return like the ebb and flow of the tides and with varying intensity. Another great write from the master of metaphor.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, and really, just for writing something on this piece....
j.