at

at

 

 

 

at 72

blue 

and inexperienced at love

 

the kind everyone supposes

when the fairy tale is not a fractured

moon

 

the grass moans

in defeat

as the mower expresses

 

and life is cut short

in  the blades

of indignities presented

 

at such a late age

when poetic genius

never quite tipped the scales.

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/6/22

Reviews

[supernova_thoughts]

The candles on top saddens a lot after one point.
However, it is beautiful to age
Cause age my friend brings not only experience
But also new ways of feeling life

[jacob erin-cilberto]

what you say is so positive here.
Maybe more candles is not a bad thing.
This is just a poem...but to tell you the truth...golden years are good in that we can just be ourselves and we don't have to answer to anyone else...by then, we are who we are.
thank you, supernova.
j.

[supernova_thoughts]

So true! Golden years are indeed beautiful. Take care, J.

[Crowley]

Well, I'm not sure how old you are my friend but untapped scales would never be your problem. This had an underwater feel to it. I feel this way at times, but then better once again "when the fairy tale is not a fractured moon." What a great line. You shine every single time.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Crowley...and I am 72.
j.

[Temperance]

When we are young we do dream of that fairy tale life but, rarely does it exist. However, when we find the right partner, it can be a fairy tale like existence. The relationship struggles we have, until we find that right person, are the heartaches and sadness that are the topic of so many poems. The right one will come along. So much in this poem j. Such sadness but, a good write my friend!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Temp,
j.

[Temperance]

You’re welcome.

[Ranger Kessel]

Always dude t and to the point. A sadness here I hope subsides. Thanks for boosting jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Ranger,
j.

[John the Baptist]

On the other hand, many poetic geniuses tipped the jug, to their detriment. Love life wasn't so great, either.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, thank you, John,
j.

[W. Barrett Munn]

Wow. Such deep introspection wonderfully described. Now write the sequel: Next. As long as there is a next and the curiosity to find out what it will say, there is hope.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Winston,
j.