You

You

sparse brew,

swollen throat

words foaming in transit

really wanted to drink you in

let you settle in my heart

drunk or not

I would have loved you

in that moment,

in the next

even pulled over, I would not give you away

you would be my secret ticket

my license to be bound forever

and when the sirens

sounded and the lights flashed in my rear view

again and again and again

I would have driven myself insane

rather than give you away

Love is like some stolen vehicle

possession of it

nine tenths of the law of gravity

as we have one last sip

before we hit earth in 

inebriated descent

sworn to secrecy's honor.

erin-cilberto

6/20/22

Reviews

[Ted Kniffen]

Quite often love feels like stolen moments
That little bit of Time ... that hint of happiness
It is the only "wealth" that is necessary.

As Peter & Gordon sang (thanks to Sir Paul)
"Please lock me away and don't allow the day..."

Good one j.

P.S. haven't been around much as I am taking a course in novel writing & it is eating up some time.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

loved Peter and Gordon...and am actually friends with Gordon's ex wife Georgie.
great duo...
Novel writing? I am looking forward to reading your first novel, Ted.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

When the sirens sounded, we can be driven wild by passion. Reaching the heights is ecstatic but then the downhill. I found this poem bitter sweet J. Some just have amazing staying power and will cling on even though most would have called it a day by then. Beautifully penned and quite moving too. This poem has multi meanings for me.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind and insightful review,
j.

[John the Baptist]

"Love is like some stolen vehicle." Good analogy, especially if the thief is drunk. That inebriated descent, alas, is not perceived until the contact with earth ends everything.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

can't argue with these words....thanks, John,
j.

[Patricia]

I swear you get better and better and I didn’t think it was possible because you are such an excellent writer and your metaphors blow me away and then you throw in passion just dripping off the page like this wow! I didn’t want this ride to end ;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Patricia,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

You finally found her in the Heat of the Moment with Sirens flashing… Passion… Much Happiness… tenderly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh, those blessed Sirens,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

A romantic piece, just oozing with passion; “ love is like some stolen vehicle “ a great line….inebriated with love ,up in the clouds somewhere “ before we hit earth”…..this is quite lovely J…very moving.
Best
B.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Betty,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome J
Best
B.

[andrew mitchell]

How unbridled passion gets you up the hill only to see it slowly dissipate into something more endearing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the smile, andrew,
j.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

This is beautiful, like an old classical love song baring it’s soul without fear. It’s hard to pick a favorite line, they’re all beautiful and full of so much heart. It’s bittersweet, strong and intense. A truly moving piece that I enjoyed, thank you so much for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Vertigo Cat,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Hello Jacob and I enjoyed the dance of words.
"possession of it
nine tenths of the law of gravity
as we have one last sip"
Yes the above lines, can be true on a blue moon. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[W. Barrett Munn]

Nice syntax, J. As WCW showed us, choice of line end makes a major difference.
Do you want to say my rear VIEW or
MY
rear view.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, W.
j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

as the reader, you decide which...how it reads to you...
sometimes ambiguity allows for flight.

[W. Barrett Munn]

Agree. If conveying emotion specifics work best, if conveying an idea that is different.