Eloquently

Eloquently

 

 

you so eloquently 

slapped your love

in blank anger

now you so eloquently

wear bracelets

 

the kind that puts you behind

poems

that strike back with words

to make your mind bruised red

and your pride sitting in a cold cell

 

eloquently, you arrive at conclusions

then delusions

 

then confusion

as to the conclusion

 

you have come to be.

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/12/22

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Abuse can take many forms from shouting hurtful insults to actual physical altercations. Dreams can be bruised and broken, the same as flesh and bone; hopes can be crushed and trust destroyed. The amount you care for someone is directly related to their ability to anger or frustrate you. Sometimes, it's best to step back from that immediate response and reason the situation through rather than respond by reflex. It begins by focusing on what is important and weighing our actions against any possible rewards or consequences. I'm teaching my daughter not to be overwhelmed with the opinions of others; teaching her to trust her heart, instead. It's a tedious lesson but one well worth teaching and learning. Every great success story in the world had naysayers, after all, from the Wright brother's flying machine to the music of The Beatles. Follow your dream and don't be sidelined by the opinions of others, no matter how hurtful they may be. Allow them their opinion but it doesn't mean you must respect it or make it a self-fulfilling prophecy. It's all about perspective as are so many things in life. Perhaps we can then defeat their hasty "conclusions" becoming our "delusions" . I enjoyed the read. Great stuff.

[Carola]

great review fabian, it helped me to understand jacob's poem.
cheerio carola

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your extensive and insightful review, Fabian,
j.

[Lena]

I like This! It made me laugh out loud. The lesson? Keep your hands to yourself!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lena,
j.

[Temperance]

eloquently, you arrive at conclusions
then delusions
then confusion
as to the conclusion
you have come to be.

erin - I like the way these words sing and, confused delusion is what one ends up with. Nice!

Thank you for sharing!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Temperance,
j.

[Cherrie]

Yes when we don't play nice with others we my not like the accessories we are given. Latched bangles never a good thing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

absolutely...thank you, Cherrie,
j.

[V]

Relatable and elegant (ly) on point. Your words and views never disappoint.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, V.
j.