the poem you wrote and my bad eyes

the poem you wrote and my bad eyes

 

 

 

i am bewildered by your smile,

and why i don't trust it

there is a conniving intervention

between you and me

and the whispers

that plague my night air

 

in the dark,

you deftly, treacherously

elude my arms

the tears you shed are for you

not me

 

evidently,

the leaning is away

our moons are not the same

you are a shadowed heart

 

slipping away, silently screaming

to be free

 

and I, reluctant to hear it.

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/14/22

Reviews

[lifejunkie]

Wow, the lines especially, "the tears you shed are for you/not me'" it so hard. I just ended the most important relationship in my life a short while ago because of borderline personality disorder, and still am going back and forth between whether it's better to keep a toe dipped in the pool even if someone is sooo unhealthy and makes me miserable, or cutting contact altogether. Your words stiffened by resolve, thank you, I feel like I did right when I made the decision again right now.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes we just have to leave what we love.
hard as it is.
thank you for sharing this, as it makes me feel this poem had some worth to it.
j.

[lifejunkie]

It sure did, the person in question is my daughter who just had a baby boy, and I was wavering. But there's unresolved addiction issues, a sort of impossible situation, but I still get tempted to reestablish contact regardless. This really made me think about how it would all over again.

[andrew mitchell]

Scars can be like ghosts, haunting to the core.when we focus more on oneself and don’t listen to the signs of the other self, somewhere in the mix we lose ourselves altogether.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

true, andrew, quite true.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Ouch, felt this one, so much tension. The deception, the dishonesty of it all. Trying to pull the wool over the eyes of the partner instead of facing upto the truth. Sad one J, especially to be on the receiving end of it all. Great composition.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Chris,
j.

[Temperance]

Isn't it the way sometimes for both men AND women....we don't see the signs or, choose not to acknowledge them or....sometimes there are no signs at all.. Such a sad poem but so nicely written. Thank you!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Temperance,
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

what tragedy and creative tension your poem exudes, jacob ... men really can and do love .. and we can be the ones fooled ... while our partner slithers around the truth for lack of courage to use a sharp knife and a cut slice once and for all ... i feel fortunate not to have to carry those scars ... those ladies who left were all quite honest about it .. ;)
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, E.
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Jacob.. eventually we transcend this Earth and live in the Shadow of the Moon… your poetry is melancholy and life is Bittersweet. The Drama is tempered by affection like flowers soothe your 💜 heart. Be still and listen to the Wind. tenderly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Pat,
j.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Whew, how I have lived these words.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Travis...
j.

[Lena]

A painfully pure and brutal expression of two. Sometimes our hearts see what we want or need. I'm glad I found your writings. It's been a long time since I've found something to feeds my soul.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the very kind compliment, Lena,
j.

[red93]

Fabulous JE-C. Subtle and almost Yeatsian how you describe the interactions. I shall come back to this one time and again I think.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for that description of this piece, red,
j.