from the apartment

from the apartment

a dim light

exudes its improper essence

the man inside

old and wandering within himself

guilty of aspersions

transgressions

the gun resides

on an adjacent shelf

proper judgment

he was far from right

no penance

could suffice

coercion

of conscience

his fingers tap dance

closer to the trigger

the light

extinguished

a dark sleep

ensues

erin-cilberto

4/20/22

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

This is deep not for the words but what I read you've touched a my heart because it is so very true at some point it's me, but I will never say. Yet I love this write because you are brave.
Thank you for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Mauricio,
j.

[light and ashes]

A truly interesting piece.....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, light,
j.

[light and ashes]

You are very welcome.

[Anosom]

This speaks very close to my heart, I recognize the feeling of wandering whitin myself. Great writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Anosom,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Lost a sister to it a friend to it and a friend contemplating it
My answer is no
I’ll never succumb to it as the loss we leave behind is devastating
Thanks J for a great write again

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Julie...
unresolved ending...could have done it, might have not...
appreciate you,
j.

[Dave Brown]

Life too often becomes something no longer to look forward to
So many different reasons
The getting old thing doesn't work too well

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Suicide. Once I danced with her. Saved by dear Grandma and a friend. I believe, suicide can be easy. I want to read Wendy O. Williams letters. She wrote before she blow her off with a rifle. Your words honest, gentle and powerful Jacob. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, suicide is not an easy decision...
so many angles, things to think about...like those left behind...
so sad,
thank you, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree Jacob and you are welcome.

[Chris Shaw]

Dark thoughts here. I find myself saying don't do it. Suicides leave great pain in their wake. I don't think he listened. He might be out of his agony, others might just be starting theirs.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

or did he?

[andrew mitchell]

This suggests he pulled the trigger when I read a dark sleep ensures.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

maybe...there is uncertainty...
thank you, andrew,
j.