D+

D+

 

 

we jump to conclusions

too often,

why don't we jump over them

instead?

 

or maybe we should just skip introductions

get to the body of what we are, sooner

describe the togetherness in detail

then, finish ourselves

 

like a poorly written essay

the grade is in the memory.

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/26/22

Reviews

[Marina]

Thankfully I never had any D+ grades in my educational life, but I have had worse than a D+ relationship. One particular 'student' was given an 'F' off grade by myself and that was very satisfying! Like a good essay, we really do need to work on the body and fill it with as many nice details as possible. As a teacher yourself, you would know that it is always the body of an essay that is most important. The conclusion is just a summary of all that came before. Spend quality time in the body and the conclusion will lead us to a positive grade. Quite an inventive metaphor, Jacob. I enjoyed it. 💛

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your metaphorical comments...
I appreciate your kind review, Marina,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

All truth wrapped in a poetic gift. I can't agree more sir Jacob. Maybe it is inferiority, jealousy, superiority, unfairness, impatience, meanness and so forth are some of our intents . Who knows???
Could be....
An excellent poem indeed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

agreed, Sami.....hard to tell which, but not good motivations.
thank you,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Yes siiiirrrr. You are welcome.

[Chris Shaw]

like a poorly written essay
the grade is in the memory

A D plus, isn't a good grade is? A failure, a disappointment. I think we are looking at relationships here. Maybe if they had been handled differently, the outcomes would have had a better grade. Lots to ponder on here. I really like your opening stanza. There is much truth in it. We do jump to conclusions. On reflection, I think that isn't wise. Nice little poem J. Had me reflecting alot.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

should have studied more I think....but I didn't...thank you for your kind review, Chris,
j.

[lightsong]

Another imaginary of You that speaks more than an image. the oneness of humanity can never be happened if all we do is judging each others. for each one to reach to the core and be one with it is the key. imagine all souls filled with light and love dancing in harmony together. that's the real oneness. wonderful Mr. J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, lightsong,
j.