D+

D+

 

 

we jump to conclusions

too often,

why don't we jump over them

instead?

 

or maybe we should just skip introductions

get to the body of what we are, sooner

describe the togetherness in detail

then, finish ourselves

 

like a poorly written essay

the grade is in the memory.

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/26/22

Reviews

[Marina]

Thankfully I never had any D+ grades in my educational life, but I have had worse than a D+ relationship. One particular 'student' was given an 'F' off grade by myself and that was very satisfying! Like a good essay, we really do need to work on the body and fill it with as many nice details as possible. As a teacher yourself, you would know that it is always the body of an essay that is most important. The conclusion is just a summary of all that came before. Spend quality time in the body and the conclusion will lead us to a positive grade. Quite an inventive metaphor, Jacob. I enjoyed it. 💛

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your metaphorical comments...
I appreciate your kind review, Marina,
j.

[JE Falcon]

Strangely enough, I have wondered the very same things and reached the same conclusion. The problem was, I received a "D-" and had to do it all over again. --- A fun read, thanks!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, JE,
j.

[Cherrie]

Oh the horror !
-Not a D+ -
Stars will fall from their pedestal.

As far as assumptions go. I've been guilty of it from time to time. I try to either A ask or B let it go .

[jacob erin-cilberto]

well, if you do that, no D for you...C at the worst...:)))

[Cherrie]

...lol... I'm a over achiever a C might kill me too. Don't tell the grandkids I'll never hear the end of it. :)

[Diana]

I love the subversiveness of this. "jumping over conclusions" and not "to" them... It presents one with a nice visual (inside my head at least) to match the meaning, also.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Diana,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

D+... I don't believe I owned a grade like that... but that's detail....let's get to the meat of things here... I think that's what you mean... in the big picture of life, details are miniscule compared to what you call the "body" of things... a relationship between two people...why do we jump to conclusions? because that is what we are trained to do....instead, what you suggest is NOT jumping to conclusions, but taking precaution of what you say or do...or think before you conclude...I love the line"the grade is the memory"
how true!!! who cares in scheme of things?
Great!!
Best,
B.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really insightful review, Betty.
thank you,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank J.. good poem too, makes you think a bit😊

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Ok I love this
I see this as we should give ourselves A. When we get a D for trying hard
I see this as we should jump into others shoes and not make a conclusion till we’ve lived their day
Oh and your ending is brilliant the grade is in the memory so beautiful

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Walk a mile in my shoes....that might get us a good grade...thank you for your words, Julie,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Yeh great song who was it. ?? recall
Hope you well there Jacob

[Lathen Griffiths]

Give yourself an A+ buddy, you’re a genius, if anyone asks , I’ll back you up,

[jacob erin-cilberto]

far from that, but thank you, Lathen,
j.

[Re-Pete]

we could all use some improvement and we must not dwell on failures - they are learned opportunities to improve. we are what we are but can still work with what we've got to do better. that grade speaks volumes ... :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yeah, damn...almost a "C."
Ifigure in ten years when I am 80 I might just improve.
j.

[Re-Pete]

lol. still better than an F ... :)

[Patricia]

We are forever changing so we are never finished… it’s not toward the end we open the envelope and look at our grades but then it’s never too late to improve.

As a couple, not so different, I can tell you hubby’s grade goes up and down ;) just kidding, it’s mine that goes up and down, college looks like kindergarten compared to marriage;)

As a world… well, definitely a D+ and that’s being generous

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, the world is barely hanging on to that "D."
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Some essays, like poems and people, are not beyond redemption. We might salvage the good and discard the bad; rearrange the entirety into something better or start over from scratch. If it has life, it might be worth saving. I think of all the rejection slips famous authors, poets and songwriters have received on their way to becoming famous. Frost threw over half his poems away. Jack London had shoeboxes full of rejection slips, he kept. The Beatles were told, "Guitar bands are on the way out.." etc. Maybe we can still raise that grade to impressive from merely passing. One can only hope and try. Your metaphor is strong, the writing force is with you. I enjoyed the read, my friend,

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Glad the Beatles didn't listen!
thank you, Fabian,
j.