tangled line

tangled line

 

 

waiting for grief to abate

is like waiting for a scavenger fish

to take a bait

and swim away with our sorrow

so that we may be left alone

to tread the water of our tears...

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/23/22

Reviews

[lightsong]

exactly like, let the waves come wash over me... drown and overwhelm me. after the flood comes the quietness.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and it is always a better quiet than before.
thank you, lightsong,
j.

[Fran Marie]

tangled in grief stricken
waters ..we get hooked
into sorrows of the reel.
kind; always that sentimental
feeling just below the surface..

Nice work Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Fran,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

If only a fish could swim away with sorrow. I don't think sorrow or grief every truly leave us. They are part of us. They teach us a lot. Grief morphs through the years. Perhaps the scavenger fish takes a part of it. Powerful write, Jacob. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, once we swim in grief...the fins keep working the rest of our lives...so true.
thank you, Lydi
j.

[Fairy Khan]

How desperate we feel to get rid of our grief! I wish there really was a scavenger fish capable of doing it, but we must feel everything and come up stronger, better. Lovely write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Such insight...thank you, Fairy,
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Too many times I think we reel that sucker in bringing the grief back. May all our tears be only those of joy, fond remembrance or tender sentimentality. I enjoyed.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Fabian,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Oh J, this is so impactful and so relatable. You just want the pain of grief over and done with but it just doesn't work like that. Great piece of brevity.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you dear Chris,
j.

[Gee]

Know this feeling oh so well. Methinks more scavenger fish are needed so that the bait taken much quicker and the healing process then sped up

[jacob erin-cilberto]

don't we wish?
thanks, Gee,
j.

[Gee]

My pleasure