Wretch

Wretch

 

 

 

sedimentary

societal blunder

the one left to frigid winds

cowers to the countenance

masks her face with shame

 

she is equal

but their math

does not compute

she is left out 

of their equation.

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/18/22

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

Life is not fair as the saying goes. Hard to achieve an equitable formula to satisfy one side or the other but worth trying. There is always a botched argument, a blunder of misunderstanding.
Excellent brevity sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Sami,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome sir Jacob.

[Andrew John]

Lovely, sad one, Jacob. I enjoyed this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Andrew,
j.

[Miss Sharon]

Very well written as always Jacob. You always amaze me with your creativity my friend! ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Sharon,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

These beautiful metaphors remind me of someone or a group of people is being ostracized for what reason.all of us are equal but not to society as it is.I love the last line…” she is left out of their equation”…an important write about how cruel society can be.
Best, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind and understanding review, Betty,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome J.
Best, B

[Ken Simm.]

Sadness taken through experience. Excellent.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Ken,
j.

[Writergurl]

love your last stanza, this is wonderful

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, writergurl,

[Desert Knave]

I think many of us can relate to being left out of the equation. A very strong write. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Jim,
j.

[Patricia]

Shame is such a strong word as is wretch sometimes not always fair they go together when sometimes they shouldn’t. When another makes one feel it, it should be theirs not the poor wretch. Relatable to the past, well done!